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Argument 高分范文对比1 Six months ago the region of Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles traveling on the regions highways by ten miles per hour.??Since that change took effect, the number of automobile accidents in that region has increased by 15 percent.??But the speed limit in Elmsford, a region neighboring Forestville, remained unchanged, and automobile accidents declined slightly during the same six-month period.??Therefore, if the citizens of Forestville want to reduce the number of automobile accidents on the regions highways, they should campaign to reduce Forestvilles speed limit to what it was before the increase.题目分析：论据，结论分析：作者的论据有：1.? ? ? ? Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles by ten miles per hour2.? ? ? ? the number of automobile accidents in that region has increased by 15 percent3.? ? ? ? the speed limit in Elmsford remained unchanged, and automobile accidents declined slightly during the same six-month period结论是：if the citizens of Forestville want to reduce the number of automobile accidents on the regions highways, they should campaign to reduce Forestvilles speed limit to what it was before the increase先分析论据，论证本身的问题（但这并不是ETS强调的入手点）对论据２，可以质疑它的基数是否足够大，对于结论可以质疑要求市民进行campaign这样的活动是否可取．现在再来看看最重要的the line of reasoning!l? ? ? ? 论据１，２之间作者建立了因果关系，特别注意开头的six month ago，那么我们就可以攻击它的时序性因果错误，找出他因，削弱论据１，２之间的因果联系．l? ? ? ? 论据３和论据１，２之间建立的是类比关系，不用多说，错误类比．l? ? ? ? 另外，研究作者由论据１，２，３推出结论的过程，即使１，２，３成立，那么是否还忽略了其他导致交通事故的原因？是否限速就一定能够减少交通事故？等等．下面是范文分析：6分：The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. By making a comparison of the region of Forestville, the town with the higher speed limit and therefore (这里省略higher)automobile accidents, with the region of Elmsford, an area of a lower speed limit and subsequently fewer accidents, the argument for reducing Forestvilles speed limits in order to decrease accidents seems logical.（用了seem实际上就是说not logical）(语言上，可以看出长短句的结合非常好，复述句是结构很好的长句，但是指明逻辑错误的句子短，醒目，并且就在文章开头，开门见山！使用make a c