提高作文必背句型复习课程.ppt

3 作文题目： 暑假即将来临。你班同学讨论了假期计划，提出了不同看法，请根据提示写一篇有关讨论的英语短文，并谈谈你的看法。 优点 缺点 呆在家中 花费少、舒适方便 不能亲身了解外界 外出旅游 增长知识、开阔眼界 花费多、旅途不便 注意：词数不少于120。 满分作文： Yesterday, our class had a discussion about our summer holiday plans. The class was split between the students that would stay at home and the students who prefer travel. The students that plan to stay at home want to save money. They know that home is more comfortable because their parents will look after them. On the other hand, they don’t get a chance to explore the outside world. The other students are keen to travel even though it will be expensive. They realize they will meet difficulties, but they believe the experience will expand their view of the world. In my opinion, it is better to expand our horizons through travel while we are young and our parents can afford it. 亮点分析： 内容全面，涵盖了所有要点，表达条理清楚。使用了较多句式结构，如定语从句，状语从句，宾语从句等。过渡语的使用，如on the other hand, but, in my opinion，也给文章增色不少。词汇也很丰富，如prefer travel, explore the outside world, keen, expand等。 学生习作评析 1 作文题目： 假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda)，一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封不少于120词的短信。 1.自我介绍； 2.祝贺苏琳生日； 3.感谢工作人员； 4.索取苏琳三岁生日照。 学生习作 Dear Sir/Madam, Greetings from China! I am a high school student from No.1 middle school1.I write2 this letter to celebrate Sulin’s three3 birthday. I love4 pandas since I was a child. I have been taking5 attention to Sulin and Baiyun for three years. 6Thank you for taking care of them. I think you may feel tired but also feel very interested7, right? I always dream that if I were you, I would become a happiness8 girl. Finally, I hope that I can get a Sulin’s three9birthday photo. Could you give it to me? I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours truly,