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英语四级作文提分技巧之巧用代词 Example: Unnecessary: It is a truth that is universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife. 用两个 that’s，读起来很别扭 Better: It is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife. -- Jane Austin 注：被动语态修饰的名词通常不须用关系代词。 Unnecessary: In 1970 India dedicated a nuclear power plant near Bombay, which was built with American assistance. Improved: In 1970 India dedicated a nuclear power plant near Bombay, built with American assistance. Unnecessary: During this period, Churchill spoke for a nation which was undivided and curiously happy, as it has never been in my lifetime, before or since. Improved: During this period, Churchill spoke for a nation undivided and curiously happy, as it has never been in my lifetime, before or since. Unnecessary: Justice theories have a long tradition, which goes back to Plato and Aristotle in the 5th century B.C. Improved: Justice theories have a long tradition, going back to Plato and Aristotle in the 5th century B.C. Unnecessary: Shirley Temple’s father blew nearly the entire $3 million that she made by tap dancing which made her famous in the movies. Improved: Shirley Temple’s father blew nearly the entire $3 million she made tap dancing her way to fame in the movies. Unnecessary: We told them they were the victims who deserved sympathy the most. Improved: We told them they were the victims, most deserving of sympathy. Unnecessary: Only a person who is oblivious* to the facts of modern life would doubt the need of vocational education today. Better: Only a person oblivious to the facts of modern life would doubt the need of vocational education today. Unnecessary: Not everyone in North America likes the taste of green tea, whether it contains caffeine or not. Better: With or without caffeine, not everyone in North America likes the ta