人教版 高考总复习 英语书面表达专题8.pptVIP

书面表达专题(八);学生习作点评 (一) 请根据下面的英文短诗，展开适当的想象，写一篇短文。标题为：My Teacher Mr Moore。 Theres teacher Mr Moore. Who is lovely and thirty-four. Always encouraging us to try. He leads us to a world of“why”． We all admire him more and more. 注意：1.不得照抄短诗原文。;2．必须结合短诗的内容，发挥想象，适当展开。 3．必须突出短诗的主题，结构完整，语意连贯。 4．短文不能写成诗歌形式。 5．词数：120左右。;[学生习作] My Teacher Mr Moore Mr Moore，thirty-four aged①，is a lovely teacher.But at the first sight to him，Im filling②with unkindness to him due to his serious-looking face and severe words. With time goes③，all of us make friend with④him.So we always play basketball and share our interesting experiences with him.In a word，he is not only our teacher but also our close friend.;In study，he always encourages us to try and refuses⑤to give in⑥whatever we meet.And in life，he often does a favour and spares no effort to help us. Apart from above，he also has an advantage on⑦others which is his humorous character，so we can learn more knowledge in a happy atmosphere. Now although we have separated a long time but we all miss him more and more.⑧;①表达有误，此处可用aged thirty-four作后置定语或用介词短语at the age of 34。 ②be filled with与be full of均意为“充满……的”，故此处应把filling改为filled。 ③“随着时间的推移”的正确表达法为：With time going或As time goes/went/has gone on，故此处应把With改为As，或把goes改为going。 ④make friends with sb.“与某人交朋友”，friend应用复数形式。;⑤分析句子结构可知，此处refuse应与try并列而非与encourage并列，故应用动词原形。 ⑥根据句意“不管遇到什么事情我们都不要放弃”可知，此处应用give up“放弃”，不应该用give in“屈服”。 ⑦“胜过某人”，应用介词over。 ⑧although和but不能同时出现，应去掉其中之一；现在完成时态常与“for＋一段时间”连用，故a long time前应加for。;(二) Directions：Write an English composition in about 100 to 120 words according to the points given in Chinese. 1．我最难忘的一课。 2．具体说明为什么难忘。 3．感想。;[学生习作] On my study way①，a②English class makes a deep impression on me and is remain③in my memory.At that time，Im not interested in English and always do other something④in English classes.However，this English class makes me change my mind about English.The English teachers lecture attracts me deeply.She opens a door for me，make⑤me realize English is very impor