2016届高考英语写作提升复习课件14.pptVIP

第八节　亮点句式润色的七大原则 [技法指导] 　作文要想得高分，必须要有吸引阅卷老师眼球的亮点。如何打造亮点句式呢？大家可以遵循以下七个原则。 原则一：新颖性 　改掉句中的俗词，或合理调整句子语序，都有助于提升句子的新颖性。新颖的句子能为评卷者在评卷过程中带来良性体验，能有效提升作文表达和分值。 1．变换用词 行文时，既要避免使用俗词，又要避开冷僻词汇。 (1)Though it might be difficult，you will find a way of doing it at last and you’ll achieve success. →However difficult it might be，you will find a way of doing it at last and you’ll achieve success.(2014·山东高考满分作文) 无论有多困难，你最终会找到一种干它的方法并取得成功。 (2)I believe very much that a wise choice leads to perfection. →I am pretty convinced that a wise choice leads to perfection.(2013·上海高考满分作文) 我非常相信，英明的选择会通向完美。 2．变换语序 适当变换语序也有助于提高句子新颖性。在评卷过程中，倒装句、插入语等非正常语序形式都能让评卷人眼前一亮。 (1)I was so excited that I couldn’t wait to try my hand at riding it. →So excited was I that I couldn’t wait to try my hand at riding it.(2014·福建高考满分作文) 我那么激动以致于我迫不及待的尝试骑它。 (2)I guess you must have had no end of trouble. →You must have had no end of trouble，I guess. 我想你一定经历过无数的困难。 [学以致用] 用变换用词或语序的方式增加新颖性 1．We should remember that hard work leads to success. →We should bear in mind that hard work leads to success. 2．Recycled bags are better than plastic bags in environment protecting. →Recycled bags are superior to/have advantages over plastic bags in environment protecting. 3．The days when we Chinese people were looked down upon are gone. →Gone are the days when we Chinese people were looked down upon. 4．A beautiful smile can not only make ourselves happy，but also enable others to be delighted. →Not only can a beautiful smile make ourselves happy，but also enable others to be delighted. 原则二：具体性 　在具备一定词汇量的条件下，具体的表达比泛泛而谈的内容更能引起读者的共鸣。换句话说，写作需要“真善美”，尽量避免“假大空”。 1．My friend is fixing the car. →My friend，Leon，is fixing his 12-year-old Santana. 2．I saw my classmate studying in the classroom. →I saw my naughty but lovely classmate studying in the classroom. [学以致用] 　用“具体性原则”把“假大空版”改为“真善美版” 写作要求：学校要举行一场题为“Turning a bad mood into a good one”的英语作文比赛，要求你写一篇文章，其中一个要点是如何调整心情。 假大空版：Keeping a good mood is of great importance. When you feel angry or anxious，c