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考生问题作文(选自2015年全国卷Ⅱ) Dear Lucy， I’m writing to tell you that we’ll go to the local nursing home next Saturday for the Double Ninth Festival, that is the day for us to show respect for the elderly.I’m wondering if or not you would like to go with us. As you know it, warmth and care is elderly people need.So besides tasty dumplings and cakes, we decide to organize some wonderful singing and dancing programs for them, I believe it will make them happy.We should be back around 4 o’clock in the afternoon. If you will be able to join us, please let us know and we’ll wait for you at the school gate at 9 in the morning. Looking forward to your reply. Yours， Li Hua 判为四档作文，得分18分 阅卷人升格作文 Dear Lucy， I’m writing to tell you that we’ll go to the local nursing home next Saturday for the Double Ninth Festival, which is the day for us to show respect for the elderly.I’m wondering whether or not you would like to go with us. As you know, warmth and care is what elderly people need.So besides tasty dumplings and cakes, we decide to organize some wonderful singing and dancing programs for them, which I believe will make them happy.We should be back around 4 o’clock in the afternoon. If you are able to join us, please let us know and we’ll wait for you at the school gate at 9 in the morning. Looking forward to your reply. Yours， Li Hua 判为五档作文，得分24分 阅卷人说：左栏文章应用了很多高级句式，如定语从句、名词性从句和状语从句，应该算是一篇相当不错的文章，但文章中出现的几处错误难免会让阅卷人略生厌恶之感，因而评分也就会低一个档次。而右栏的文章只改掉了左栏文章中的一些表达错误，其他未做任何修饰，评分就由18分增加到24分，在1分压倒万人的高考中，可谓字字千金。 我们，还在路上…… You made my day! 一个人所受的教育超过了自己的智力， 这样的人才有学问。