01 解密阅卷现场 2021年中考英语书面表达得分宝典.docxVIP

第一招: 解密阅卷现场,看阅卷老师如何评分 (2020·嘉兴中考) 　　在你校“劳动教育月”期间,校英语报发起了“A Helper at Home”主题征文活动。请结合自身情况,用英语写一篇短文投稿,谈谈你经常做的两项家务以及你的收获。内容要点提示如下: What you often do at home What you have learned ◆water flowers　　　　◆cook meals ◆wash the dishes ◆look after pets ◆take out the rubbish ◆…… ◆life skills ◆responsibility(责任) ◆…… 　　注意: (1)表格中的内容要点仅供选择使用,可适当发挥; (2)文中不得出现与你身份相关的信息; (3)词数: 80～100。短文首句仅供参考,不计入总词数。 短文首句: I have always been a good helper at home. ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ A Helper at Home 　　I have always been a good helper at home. As we all know, it’s important to help parents do housework during our daily life. I often help them to do housework. 　　Last Sunday, after breakfast, I began to help my parents wash clothes. Though washing clothes isn’t difficult, it took me a long time. After that, I tried to tidy my bedroom. I first made the bed and then put away my clothes and school things. 　　Looking at the tidy room, I felt tired but satisfied because I not only shared the housework for my parents, but also learnt life skills. I think it can make my parents feel more enjoyable after work. In a word, the more housework I do, the happier my parents will be. 评分标准 阅卷点评 第一档 　　能写出全部要点,行文连贯,运用了较多的语法结构和词汇、语言基本无误,完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第二档 　　符合题意要求,包含大部分要点,行文基本连贯,应用的语法结构和词汇基本正确,虽有一些语法和词汇错误,但不影响理解。 第三档 　　能写出基本要点,语句基本通顺,语法结构较简单,词汇有限,语言虽有个别错误,尚能达意。 第四档 　　仅能写出几个要点,有较多的语法和词汇错误,通篇只有个别句子可读。 第五档 　　未能传达任何有关的写作信息,写的内容均与所要求的内容无关或写的内容无法辨认。 该考生很好地完成了试题规定的写作任务,达到了预期的写作目的,可评为优秀习作,为第一档。 1. “阅”卷面 卷面整洁是书面表达得高分的重要因素。本文书写美观、规范、清楚。 2. “抓”要点 (1)本文围绕“家务”展开,紧扣主题。 (2)本文覆盖了所有的内容要点,并表达了自己的观点。 3. “审”结构 　　文章使用“三段式”,开篇点题,叙述主要内容,结尾发表感悟,要点全面。文章中 Last Sunday, after breakfast, After that等使文章时间顺序清晰,整篇文章读起来流畅。可以看出作者思路清晰,布局合理。 4. “赏”语言 (1)语言准确、表达清晰。句子Looking at the tidy room, I felt tired but satisfied because I not only shared the housework fo