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——Keep pushing—— ——Keep pushing—— PAGE / NUMPAGES ——Keep pushing—— 美国留学申请中个人陈述注意事项 美国留学申请的学生越来越多，竞争也是非常激烈，大家精心准备的个人陈述希望成为大家被录取的亮点，而不是成为大家申请成功的绊脚石。下面就和我一起来看看吧。 一、重复简历型 I earned my Bachelor of Science dee in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university 点评：个人陈述不要去重复简历中的东西，这在很多学校的PS要求中明确提到，个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上，事件解决上，而不要单纯重复已有的内容。 二、学校介绍型 I am an undergraduate in…University ， the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China. 点评：该同学的个人陈述开头等于是一个申请学校的简介，这好像是在帮助学校做宣传，或表达你有多了解该学校，而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头，白白浪费了字数，最容易被秒据掉。 三、抄袭句式型 As a student majoring in Computer Science， I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed， having entered this splendid computer world， I am more than greedy for something new. 点评：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的，很多同学在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄袭，最喜原创，所以利害关系大家想想吧。 四、救世主型 I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems bore me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy， a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind， “The world can be changed by man‘s endeavor， … 点评：一副救世主的形象，小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。个人陈述的写作一定要个人化具体化，别吹大牛，甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。 五、犹抱琵琶型 Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present， I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarully thinking， reviewing my life and analyzing my personality， I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career. 点评：重点放在自己要做重大决定上了，人生的转折点，然后来上句所谓名言警句。浪费字数，有限的字数里，同学们应该学会直接，并且抓住重点，突出自己最有优势的方面，最有特色的方面。 六、言语幼稚型 Why the gecko can climb on the wall w