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考试作文样本分析 2009年的全球金融危机使得中国的求职市场愈加激烈就业形势愈加严峻。假如你是某大学应届毕业生，针对目前全国大量大学生面临就业的严峻形势，你班同学展开了热烈的讨论，请你根据以上提示及下面表格中的内容，介绍本次讨论情况并谈谈自己的看法。 70%的同学 到西部、农村等地区，寻找更多的发展机遇。 20%的同学 10%的同学 你的看法 （请考生联系自己拟定内容，列举两至三点） 注意： 1. 对所给要点，逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。 2. 词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。 参考词汇： 职校：vocational school 常见错误一：叙述口吻不对 文章要求我们介绍班级讨论情况并谈谈自己的看法。所以尽量避免使用太多的祈使句 According to the discussion, 70 percent of the students hold the views that don’t expect too high incomes. 观点呈现不应该使用这样的祈使句型。 …we shouldn’t expect too high incomes. Seventy percent of my classmates think that we shouldn’t expect too high incomes. Find a job as soon as possible to reduce family pressure. 常见错误二：时态把握不准 本题看法呈现题，应该以一般现在时为主。 The students who thought that we shouldn’t expect too high salaries. There are 70 percent of the students suggested that… 上面的表述中，观点是一贯的，不应该是暂时的，用过去时不恰当。应改为…who think… …thinking that… 常见错误三：断句不准，纠缠不清 70 percent of the students think we shouldn’t look forward to high incomes, and should find a job as soon as possible, relief the family’s pressure, can think about going to western cities or going to the countries, so that you can seek more chances to develop. 常见错误四：不能整体把握句子，瞻前不顾后。 句子的表达，要顾全大局，不能顾此失彼。 The students who thought that we shouldn’t expect too high salaries, and we should find a job as soon as possible so that we can reduce the pressure on our families. 佳句欣赏 However, there are 10 percent of the students who plan to go on with their further education with the intention of making better preparations for applying for a better job. The rest, accounting for 10 percent, … As far as I’m concerned, I would go further study to equip myself better for the future. In view of the present situation, we can go to the west or the country for there are more opportunities to develop ourselves. from 周 娟 最佳个人观点表达 Personally, again and again, we take a high salary for granted, but facing this financial crisis, we might as well see the hard times as an experience, from which we can lear