英语：Unit16 Communication workshop-Period_1课件（北师大版选修模块6）.pptVIP

In this lesson you will be able to 1. Learn to polish by comparing two writings 2. Write a story; 3. Use linking words Lead-in Do you love stories? What factors should be included in a story? Lead-in What will you write about when you see the title A Day When Everything Went Wrong? Write three or four sentences on one bad event that you have experienced, including who, when, where and what. Read Draft A of a student’s composition on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong. Question: How many events are mentioned in the story? Events in Draft A I Walked to school; I came last in the poetry reading competition; I spilled water on my pillow Write two or three events on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong. You can write about every bad thing you have experienced, such as losing something important, hurting your leg, being late for school, failing an exam… Share your writing with your partner. What other factors should be included in a story? Why: Feelings: Put why and feelings in your writings. Share your writing with your partner. Read Draft B and tell which one is better. What does the writer add in Draft B? In Draft B, the writer uses linking words and adds some details and specific information to attract the attention of the reader. Besides, the order of events is clearer and the language is more vivid. Order of events: A: 1.Because the school bus did not … 2.At school, Mr. fan … 3.When I got into bed that night, I … B: 1.First, I had to wait 30 minutes for the school bus… 2. The next problem happened when I arrived at school. 3. The last problem of this terrible day happened when I got into… Vivid language : A: 1. It was hot and tiresome. 2. Mr. fan, the English teacher reminded me of the… This surprised me… 3. I came last in the competition. B: 1. The day was hot and tiring. 2. Mr. Fan, the English teacher, a large but friendly man, gave me a nasty surprise. He reminded me in his loud voice that … 3. I was not