书面表达强化训练分析.ppt

书面表达强化训练 段落练笔（将下列一段话翻译成英语）： 小鹏一家有五个人。他们都有自己的爱好。他的父母喜欢打羽毛球。爷爷奶奶喜欢晚饭后散步。小鹏喜欢集邮。几乎每天晚上小鹏的爷爷奶奶都给他讲故事。他们过着幸福的生活。 初中生初级表达 Xiaopeng’s family has five people. They all have their hobbies. His parents like badminton(羽毛球). His grandparents like to have a walk after supper. He likes collecting stamps. His grandparents tell him a story almost every evening. They live a happy life. 高中生高级表达 There are five people in Xiaopeng’s family ,including himself. All of them have their own hobbies. For example, his parents like badminton and his grandparents enjoy walking after supper. Collecting stamps is Xiaopeng’s favourite hobby and to his great joy, his parents tell him a story almost every evening. What a happy life they lead! 教师点评 以上两段都是使用简单句进行表述，但是读起来效果大不一样。 一般表达中存在两大问题： (1)主语的表达单调，从头到尾使用主语加谓语的单一模式。 (2)谓语的使用过于简单，三句中的“喜欢”均使用like一词，感到作者的词汇量的贫乏。以上两个问题导致整个段落表达单调、语句呆板、档次低下。 看完初级表达后再读高级表达，给人的感觉是耳目一新，越读越有味。主语的表达新颖别致，谓语的使用灵活多变，使整个段落活了起来，美了起来！ 以上高级表达，它有三大亮点： 1.主语的表达要多样化。如高级表达中的all of them,还有both his father and mother, both of them, they each like, each of them等。 2.谓语的表达灵活。如喜欢一词的表达用了like, enjoy, be fond of, go in for, be crazy about等。 3.简单句的句型变换多样。如there be 句型，动名词做主语，感叹句、倒装句、强调句型等。 书面表达原题： 假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda),一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭戈动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她母亲“白云”。 现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园 工作人员写一封信： 1.自我介绍； 2.祝贺苏琳生日； 3.感谢工作人员； 4.索取苏琳三岁生日照。 注意：1.词数100左右； 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3.开头语已为你写好。 优秀范文欣赏、研读： Dear Sir/Madam, Greetings from China! I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I have been watching her grow on your website. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of whi