Show, Dont Tell School District of Rhinelander秀别告诉兰德学区.pptVIP

Show, Dont Tell The First Rule of Writing What is Show, Don’t Tell? The Show, Don’t Tell method of writing is when the writer is able to create a picture in the readers mind, to get away from the repetition of such empty words like went, big, or said. This lesson will only help to improve the detail and ideas of your short story. Read the next two slides. How do they compare? Which is better?This . . . When I left my office that beautiful spring day, I had no idea what was in store for me. To begin with, everything was too perfect for anything unusual to happen. It was one of those days when a man feels good, feels like speaking to his neighbor, is glad to live in a country like ours, and proud of his government. You know what I mean, one of those rare days when everything is right and nothing is wrong. Or This? I left work feeling happy. It was a good day. What differences did you see in the two versions? The first version: was much longer had describing words such as beautiful spring day created a mood built up a feeling that something was about to happen Now compare the next two slides. Which is better?This . . . Still holding my dogs by their collars, I looked back. I couldn’t understand what I saw. Rubin was laying where he had fallen. His back was toward me, and his body was bent in a “U” shape. Rainie was standing on the other side of him, staring down. I hollered and asked Rainie, “What’s the matter?” He didn’t answer. He just stood as though in a trance, staring down at Rubin. I hollered again. He still didn’t answer. I didn’t know what to do. I couldn’t turn my dogs loose. They would go for the hound again. Again I hollered at Rainie, asking him to come and help me. He neither moved nor answered. I had to do something. Looking around, my glance fell on the old barbed-wire fence. I led my dogs to it. Holding onto their collars with one hand, I worked a rusty barbed wire backwards and forwa