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情景作文训练 Review the writing task 假如你是红星中学高三一班的学生。3月5日是学雷锋日，你班组织了一次帮扶活动。请根据下面四幅图所提供的活动内容和过程写一篇英文短文，为你校校刊英语专栏投稿。 senior citizens home 养老院 What do you think of it? Passage 1 Our class planned to organize an activity on March 5th, the day in memory of Lei Feng. On March 4th, our class held a class meeting to discuss where to go on March 5th. We decided to pay a visit to the senior citizens home. On March 5th, we did some cleaning in the senior citizens home. Some taught them learn English. Some of us put on performance for the old people. We said good-bye to them. Part I Problems and solutions Identify the problem If you are asked to describe the feeling the writing gives to you as the picture below, which one would you like to choose? B. A. Part I Problems and solutions Strategy 1 Part I Problems and solutions 通过增加细节使文章内容充实丰富。 Part I Problems and solutions 第一档 18分－20分 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 ·覆盖了所有内容要点； ·运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇； ·语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致； 体现了较强的语言运用能力； ·有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、结构紧凑。 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第二档 15分－17分 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 ·覆盖了所有内容要点； ·运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求； ·语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致； ·使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。 达到了预期的写作目的。 第三档 12分-14分 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 ·覆盖了内容要点； ·运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求； ·语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。 基本达到了预期的写作目的。 丰富的内容 高考情景作文评分标准 覆盖了所有内容要点； 覆盖了所有内容要点； 覆盖了所有内容要点； 丰富的内容 Learning aims At the end of the class, we will be able to 1. figure out what details are necessary for a passage; 2. improve our writing by adding necessary details properly. Part I Problems and solutions What do you think of it? Part I Problems and solutions Passage 2: March 5 would come soon. We hadn’t settled down the question of how we could help the elderly. So we sat together to exchange our mind. There were some ideas flashed through our mind. On March 5th, we went to the senior citizens home. We did some cleaning there. Some students mopped the floor, swept the floor and cleaned the mirror. In