PEP小学英语六年级下册各单元作文范例及点评.doc

PEP小学英语六年级下册各单元作文范例及点评 My friend and I ??? I’ve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. I’m 11. He’s older than me. He’s 150 cm tall. I’m 148 cm. He’s taller and stronger. He’s 43 kg and I’m 41 kg. He’s heavier. We’ve got round faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favourite colours are white and blue. We like summer best. We both like sports, too. On Saturdays, we play table tennis. On Sundays, we play basketball. He’s good at basketball. But I do better at table tennis. We laugh and play together. How happy we are! 【要领点评】 写法：这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友和我”。既然写作范围是两个人物，就要笔墨均匀，两者缺一不可。不能只描写朋友，也不能只叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。解决这个难点的关键是：找出两个人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、外貌、喜好等方面列举出每个人的具体实际情况，再进行比较，通过比较突出每个人物的特点。这样就把人物活灵活现的展现给读者了。 注意：在列举两个人的“体貌、喜好”等方面情况时，应一边列举，一边比较。不要一味指出不同，还要列举相同之处。两人能成为朋友，一定有共同语言和喜好，共性不容忽视。在表达喜好时，不同的句型应交叉运用，避免枯燥的重复。例“Our favourite colours are…”，“We like …best”，“We both like…,too”，为突出不同时间做不同运动，用“On Saturdays…”，“On Sundays…”，形成鲜明对比。常使用并列连词and 和转折连词 but ，使文章读起来更流畅。结尾以How happy we are!突出了两人从友谊中得到的快乐！ ? A Bad Cold ??? I’m not feeling well today. I think I have a bad cold. I have a headache. I have a fever. My nose hurts. My throat is sore. I have to take some medicine and stay in bed. My parents will take me to the hospital. What a bad cold! I hope I can be better soon. And I want to go to school. 【要领点评】 写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙了得病、病的症状、服药及治疗的全过程。写出了小作者希望快点康复，好去上学的愿望。 时态：这篇文章可以采用一般现在时来写。如果主语是第三人称单数，动词别忘加s。 句型：要用feel 加形容词，和表示“患某种疾病“的用法have+表示的疾病的单词。 注意：在表示疾病时，可以使用-ache,hurt 和sore。不要只用一个单词，以避免枯燥。要写出得病后的简单治疗及心情，不能只写得病的情况。常见病句：My nose is hurt。因为be后面要加形容词，而hurt是动词，因此应使用sore；东西放在床上要用on the bed。生病，是卧床不起，应该说stay in bed。 表示吃药时，通过用take some medicine，不用eat。? Zoom’s Weekend ??? Zoom had a busy weekend. On Saturday morning, he washed his clothes and went to a park. He did his homework and went fishing on Saturday afternoon. On Sunday morning, he cleaned his room and visited his grandparents. He played football and watch TV on Sunday aftern