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我的真题作文改造 2013年真题（成功品质——选择） 第一段（描述图画）3句 第一句：As is shown above，某个位置有中心事物——完全倒装描述； 中心事物怎么样——非谓语动词描述；周围事物怎么样或者在 做什么——独立主格描述(当遇到不会写的词，如饺子，尤其是中国味道 浓郁的词，就直接写拼音，后面加同位语进行解释：“jiaozi”,a traditional chinese food for the spring festival) As is shown above, at a crossroad stand a group of university graduates,being at a loss when facing a lot of choices,such as to find a job,to pursue the master degree at home,to go abroad for further study and to establish the career. Recently,this picture has triggered a heated discussion on the We chat —the most influential social media in china 第二句：The author’s real purpose is not as simple as the picture itself,but to lead observers to find out what hides behind the iceberg. 第二段（阐述图画含义） 第一句：（提出观点） nothing can be compared with +重要主题，+状语 The picture demonstrates two strikingly different attitudes,pessimism and optimism,when facing the same thing and tells us that nothing can be compared with the optimism and the enthusiasm,especially in the times of knowledge explosion,when the news ,facts,opinions even rumors have been bombarding us from every corner of the world. 第二句：表明公众态度—— What’s more ,nobody dare fail to attach due attention to the importance of optimism. People from all around the world ,governments and the international organizations give priority to the fundamental role of choice. 第三句：句群——By doing so...这样一来......展开P52（6句） Indeed,making the advisable choice remains to be an integral part for one’s personal success. Put another way ,without the right direction ,one could barely fit into society,let alone attain social status. The proper choice of the future career can help people treat the world with benevolence,confidence and tolerance. Were there no rational decision for our future life,hardly can we taste the real happiness of the world.(integral完整的，必须的;benevolence /b?nev?l?ns/,仁慈) 第三段（评论或者举例）万能结尾 Now we need to work with perseverance in a down-to-earth way. Henry Ford , a great American industrialist工业家, the creator of the”mo