四级作文—漫画作文.ppt

四六级作文—漫画作文 People are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks to see. 开头难 出现问题： １.有些同学第一段太过冗长，不少同学直接引用漫画原话。 ２.描述漫画时，有些同学时态使用错误。 ３.有些同学只是描述了漫画但却没有引出漫画的内涵。 学生佳作 Nowadays, more and more people use mobile phones without restraint（无所忌惮地）. They often use it in all occasions. In the comic, they use the mobile phones while crossing the road. It’s too crazy. （顾薇薇） From the drawing we can easily identify what the author intend to convey. The increasing use of mobile phones can do harm to our lives. (吴佳凤） As the drawing presents, there is a man walking across the street absorbedly（全神贯注地） focusing on his cell phone without noticing the surroundings. This sort of phenomenon is not uncommon in some metropolis（大都市）, especially among the youngsters. You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then express your views on the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words. Dad, I am a bit worried about disposing of nuclear weapon. If you can empty the dustbin, you can do anything. The Importance of Doing Small Things Before Undertaking Something Big Para 1 This is a thought-provoking（引人深思的） cartoon: a young guy tells his father that he is a bit worried about disposing of nuclear waste; however, his father informs the guy of a truth: if one can empty the dustbin, he can do anything(用自己的语言重新陈述）. For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay, you should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then express your views on the importance of learning basic skills. No offense, but by the time we’re in the job market, won’t that stuff be outdated With the development of society, some students think basic knowledge is not useful. The picture reflects that some students begin to question the significance of learning basic knowledge and skills（用自己的语言总结）. 语言问题 1.词性使用错误 2.搭配错误 3.句子成分残缺 4.中式英语 问题一：分不清一些单词的