雅思大作文探：看似遥不可及的7分.docx

智课网IELTS备考资料雅思大作文探秘：看似遥不可及的7分 摘要： 究竟怎样的文章，才能得到考官的青睐，最终幸运的得到7分的分数呢？ 现在的年轻人总是会发出“理想很丰满，现实很骨感”这样的感叹，来表达对现实生活的无奈。而在 雅思 写作考试中，考生们又何尝不会经历这种无奈呢？写作7分是许多考生梦寐以求的分数，但即使是一些外籍教师所撰写的范文，在考官笔下也不过是7-8分！对于国内大多数雅思考生而言，7分似乎是可望而不可及的。那么，究竟怎样的文章，才能得到考官的青睐，最终幸运的得到7分的分数呢？ 一．Task response 1. 具体要求 Task response表示任务的完成。在官方给出的评分标准中，7分有这样的要求： 1. Address all parts of the task, 2. Present a clear position throughout the response, 3. Present, extend and support main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus. ① 回答了题目要求的所有问题。②整篇文章观点鲜明。③详细的解释和论证了观点。 2. 范例评析 ▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2 Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 1. 考生需要对题目中的两个相反的观点进行分析，不能只分析自己倾向的观点。即：固定不变的定罪制度有何作用；依据犯罪动机和环境灵活的定罪制度有何作用。 2. 考生需要非常清楚的表明自己的观点，即回答应当如何对罪犯的犯罪行为定罪。 3. 考生对于题目中两个相反观点的分析需要摆出充足的论据，提出自己的理由并通过例子来证明。 7.5分考生范文选段：对固定不变的定罪制度的分析 On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. ‖Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. ‖This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. ‖If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts. 1. 观点：固定的惩罚制度对社会有威慑力。（fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society。） 2. 理由：考虑犯罪成本（reconsider committing crimes in the first place） 3. 扩展结果：有利于社会稳定（lea