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语言不地道;中文式思维;词汇错误;卷面有涂改;得15分. 有少许语言错误; 得22分 （2016全国卷I）假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resume）。给外教Mr Jenkins 写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format） 注意： 1. 词数100左右; 2. 可以适当增加细节，已使行文连贯。 Practice Think about…? The style: The main idea: Person: Tense: The style: The main idea: Person: Tense: a letter for help ask whether the foreign teacher can help to polish the letter of application and resume the first person the simple present tense 列要点 Point 1: 学生李华，向您求助 Point 2: 暑假想去一公司任职 Point3: 申请书和个人简历已完成，希望老师帮忙修改 Point4：修改内容 Point5：表达期望 扣主题 拓展句 Point 1: 升级句式（名词作同位语） Point 2：拓展 今年暑假去一家公司兼职+做兼职的意义(非限制性定语从句) Point 3：拓展 Firstly…Secondly…Lastly…/ besides… Dear Ms Jenkins, Im one of your students, Li Hua from Class Two. Im writing to ask for your help. This summer I intend to take up a part-time job in a foreign company, through which I would like to broaden my horizons, gain some working experience and meet new friends. My application and resume have been prepared and I sincerely hope you can help me polish them. Firstly, Im wondering if you can help add some contents. Besides, if there are some mistakes in them, I hope you can help correct them. Lastly, I attach some materials whose format had better be changed and hope you can help. I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to do so much for me. Looking forward to your early reply. Yours truly, Li Hua 五档作文 Dear Ms Jenkins, I’m Li Hua from your English writing class last term. I’m writing to ask for your help. I’m applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation, and I have just completed my application letter and resume. However, I am not quite sure of the language and the format I’ve used. I know you have a very busy schedule, but I’d be very