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2. Smells of the Sun I love the sun. I love the sun’s rays, light and warmth, especially the sun’s smells. When the sun comes again after the rain, I can inhale the humid air made by the sun’s heat. In a sunny garden, the scent of the grass and of plants that carry the smells of the sun waft along in the breeze. I like sunning my bedclothes if it is a nice warm, sunshiny day, then the bedclothes gain an aroma of the sun after their sunbath. I ask my son, “Can you smell the sun in your bedclothes?” He picks up a corner of his bedclothes, then bends his head close to them and breathes in deeply. He answers, “What a wonderful smell of the sun.” I enjoy the smells of the sun. Comment on Smells of the Sun Comment: The writer writes of the suns smells in a short paragraph. She illustrates for us the power of concrete imagery, dialogue, and descriptive words. In-Class Exercise : describing food Take a look at the following picture and come up with three to four sentences to develop The pizza is delicious. Note: 1. Use one dominant impression. 2. Try to explore the senses. 3. Use details. Students’ Versions 1. As you see it, the colorful decorated salad brighten your eyes. The smell invades your nose that you can’t help eating it. After a bite, the flavor of different kinds of fruits is filled with your mouth. It’s just to melt as your tongue touches it. 2. The golden round pizza approves that it is done just now. Fresh vegetables is on it, attracting the customers’ attention, sending a message “taste me”. Touching my stomach, I think it requires the pizza in front of me. Sighed, I start to have the pizza to fit my stomach. The pizza was delicious. Steam rising up off the melted cheese made my mouth water. The first bite, my teeth sinking into the cheese through the tomato sauce and into the moist crust, made me chew and swallow rapidly. Even the cheese and tomato sauce, sticking to my fingertips, beg