12月月考基础写作：李华找合租√.ppt

* 2013广州 一模基础写作讲评 地点 玫瑰街1号 房租总额 $?380/月? 公寓情况 80平方米；两房一厅，一厨一卫；免费无线上网(wifi)，邻近两大超市及公共图书馆交通便利，步行5分钟至地铁 合租人 有责任心，不抽烟 有意者请于下午6点后致电：5558-5916? 假设你是李华,正在国外求学,租了一间公寓, 想寻找一个合租人.请根据以下信息写一封 邮件给租方中介,介绍公寓及要求. 1. 写作对象是谁？ 租房中介 2. 语言语气？ 客观，客气 5句话如何分配？ S1: 地点+租金 S2: 公寓的设施 S3: 周边配套及交通 S4: 合租人的要求 S5: 联系 审题 地点 玫瑰街1号 房租总额 $?380/月? The apartment is located at No.1,Rose Street and the total rent is $380 per month. Located/Situated/Lying at No.1,Rose Street, the apartment costs $380 per month. The apartment, the rent of which is 380 dollars per month in total, is located at No.1,Rose Street. ＊注意地点方位介词的准确使用,表示“在门牌号,街道” at +门牌号（基数词）+ 街道名+ （Street/Road） 表达的 准确性 多样性 并列 非谓语 定从 并列 非谓语 并列 定从 非谓语 并列 并列 非谓语 并列 定从 非谓语 并列 公寓设施 80平方米；两房一厅，一厨一卫；免费无线上网（wifi)? It’s 80 square meters, with two bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen, a bathroom and free wifi access. With an area of 80 square meters, the apartment has …and wifi is provided for free. Consisting of…, the apartment is 80 square meters, equipped with free wifi. / where one can enjoy free wifi. 表达的 准确性 多样性 周边配套及交通 邻近两大超市及公共图书馆；交通便利，步行5分钟至地铁站 邻近： be close to/be nearby be close at hand just around the corner 步行5分钟到.. : a five minutes walk to it takes sb 5 minutes to walk to walk for five minutes, and you will… 表达的 准确性 多样性 公寓情况 邻近两大超市及公共图书馆交通便利，步行5分钟至地铁站 Two large supermarkets and a public library are nearby, and it’s a convenient five minutes walk to the metro station. Moreover, close to …, the apartment enjoys a convenient transport with a five minutes’ walk to the metro station./ allowing people to walk to the metro station within five minutes. 表达的 准确性 多样性 合租人 有责任心，不抽烟 The student I want to share the apartment with should be a non-smoker with a sense of responsibility. The partner is expected to be one who is a non-smoker and most importantly, with a sense of responsibility. Itll be better if .. 表达的 准确性 多样性 The apartment is located at No. 1, Rose Street and the total rent is $380 per mon