四六级写作精讲.pptVIP

problems in our writing (1). 结构：看不出清楚的三部分或三段 (2). 切题：没有按照三句提纲写作 (3). 表达：语言表达不清,支离破碎。 Social many people develop now at full speed throw up one job and take on another. (?) 中式英语 The story make me have some ideas. (?) We have nobody to depend on in the future. (?) There have many people. (?) …to live without their parents. (?) School is a study place. (?) money society (?) social man (?) reality story (?) 语法错误-词汇 writter Was took/tooked/taked on one hand…on another hand… firstly…the other hand… For one thing…for the other thing… to come true their different aim Make them do / let them do (4).连贯性 1. 缺少连贯性。没有连接词 2. 连接词使用不当。如Therefore，However, As a result, etc. (5). 其他 1. 题目：缺失，字母大小写。 2. 文中出现省略号“……”和缩略语,如“Oct.”，“aren’t”，应用“etc.”, “and so on”表达“等”。 3. 文中出现中文甚至空格，如“心理课程”，“　　　　　”。 4．主观表述，论据不充分，举例不具代表性，身边的事例。…should… 5．字数过多，书写潦草，卷面不洁。 范文分析 Accidents Concerning Campus Security 1. 目前校园安全事故常有发生 2. 这种现象造成的恶劣影响 3. 应该如何杜绝这种现象 Accidents Concerning Campus Security 1. 目前校园安全事故常有发生 It is an issue that accidents concerning campus security, which has shocked the public and sparked a heated discussion, frequently occur in some schools. 2. 这种现象造成的恶劣影响 This phenomenon can impose a quite negative impact on the individual as well as the whole society. First of all, the cruel scene has made many passers-by panic, not to mention the intense grief suffered by the relatives of the young victims. Besides, the phenomenon will definitely pose a threat to the stability and security of the whole society. Moreover, Some people even lose their confidence in living a secure and happy life. Accidents Concerning Campus Security 3. 应该如何杜绝这种现象 From my personal perspective, several counter-measures can be taken. For one thing, relevant authorities are to make sure that some equipments are available in case of emergencies. For another, activities are to be launched to enhance the safety awareness of the pupils as well as their parents. Only in this way can we f