英语人教版九年级全册中考英语写作评改（环境篇）.docVIP

中考英语作文评改（结构，多样化，高级词汇） Handout 亲爱的同学， 这篇是小明同学所写的有关于环境问题的稿件，请帮忙修改一下哦！ Your Outline Revised(修改)稿）Draft( Revised(修改)稿） Dear Li Lei, Dear Li Lei, Today, many bad things pollute the environment badly. Many factories pollute air with black smoke. There are too many cars in the city. We should close down factories. People don’t throw rubbish into the bins. It’s so terrible. We should take action. We should punish some people. We should take a bus to our school. People always use plastic bags. Plastic bags are harmful to the environment. Many people like to use napkins, it is not good. Xiao Ming Evaluation Fo 点评：优点： 缺点： Evaluation Form 亲爱的同学们，这是小明同学修改的二稿，可是老师仍然不满意，请你继续帮助他！ Revised(修改稿） Dear Li Lei, Today, many bad things pollute the environment badly. Many factories pollute air with black smoke. There are too many cars in the city. People always throw rubbish. It’s so terrible. And people always use plastic Dear Li Lei, Today, many bad things pollute the environment badly. Many factories pollute air with black smoke. There are too many cars in the city. People always throw rubbish. It’s so terrible. And people always use plastic bags, but they are harmful to the environment. And many people like to use napkins, it’s not green. And many people don’t throw rubbish into the bins. We should take action. We should close down factories and take a bus to our school. And we should use reusable bags. We should punish those people. If everyone can play a part in saving the environment, it will be better and better. Xiao Ming Homework.（3稿） ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________