雅思大作文流程题.ppt

Issues Demand Attention 2. 语言 正式书面语言，强调客观和准确性。避免使用第一人称的使用，减少非正式说法。 Ex. I believe that the graph showed a significant decline in the youth smoking rate.(delete) We can see that car ownership surged from just under 1 percent to nearly 3 percent. 改正:the chart shows that….. Issues Demand Attention 3. 同位语和分词作状语 学会使用同位语和分词作状语的用法，使句子简洁、清楚。 Ex. Middle-class families are those families that are earning between ＄20’000 and ＄ 50’000. Middle-class families enjoyed the greatest increase in standard of living. The increase was as high as 13 percent. 改写： Middle-class families, earning between ＄20’000 and ＄ 50’000, enjoyed the greatest increase in standard of living, a 13 percent rise. 现在分词 同位语 Issues Demand Attention 4. 语法错误Grammatical Errors The weight of the service sector in GDP was dropped from 80 percent in 1990 to over 70 percent in 2009. Drop: 应用为主动语态；表示升降的单词一般都是intransitive verb: increase, surge, climb, jump, leap, decrease, slide, slip, plunge， plummet（急剧下降），etc。 Ex. Following the decrease for five years or more, prices were rebounded to the highest level in 2000. Rebound:变为主动语态 注意：不及物动词不能用成被动语态 Issues Demand Attention 4. 语法错误Grammatical Errors The number of obese[?u‘bi:s] （肥胖的） people in the UK dramatically increased in at least ten years. 改正：increased dramatically The illiteracy rate slightly dropped to 2.3%, but it was still the third highest ever recorded. 注意：副词的位置： 小作文中表示上升下降的副词一般放在动词后面。如 :大幅度地:substantially, considerably；急剧地： sharply, steeply；稳步地：steadily, 适度地：moderately, 轻微地：slightly等。 Issues Demand Attention 4. 语法错误Grammatical Errors In the first half of 2006, the number of recorded traffic accidents in New York rose 8-fold to 2’504, cost 35million dollars. 错误: 出现两个谓语动词rose 和cost。 改正：cost 变成现在分词，costing… There were 100’000 more people work on a full-time basis in 2004 than in 1994. 改正：work改成现在分词working， 作people的定语。 注意：一个句子不能有两个谓语动词。 Issues Demand Attention 4. 语法错误Grammatical Errors An average of 48’000 books was printed each month, one third of which were fict