1.读后续写 - 动作细节描写.ppt

动作细节描写 by Kevin Soy 读后续写专项训练 1 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. Help! No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. (2016.10浙江) 小结 动作细节的描写应该围绕着一个中心展开，否则会导致叙述散乱，内容混杂； 动作细节的描写应该组织一系列的动词，以动作的次第发生来叙述整个过程； 动作细节的描写应该有相应信息的支撑，以丰富细节内容，增强可读性。 1. 上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设计一个情节，描述具体经过，词数80左右。 Last Sunday, Li Hua went to Xinhua Bookstore to b