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2020雅思7分大作文范文批改和解析 距离雅思写作7分你大概还有3个步骤要走，是的，不是谁都可以轻轻松松活动雅思高分的。今天小编给大家带来了雅思7分大作范文批改和解析,希望能够帮助到大家，一起来学习吧。 雅思7分大作范文批改和解析 雅思写作提高第一步：结构(5.0 - 5.5) 问题：出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad) 同学：One reason for those who decide to go overseas to get a higher degree is that they believe they can get better education in certain fields. That is to say, different universities in different countries have their specialized courses and rich resources can be provided according to their needs and requirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that living in an all-round English environment and being affected by local culture make people quick learners. 解析：出国留学和高学历完全是两回事(出去读初中和高中都算出国);出国就是better education，在国内就不是better? 出国留学可不仅仅是上大学，而该同学认为出国留学就是去上大学的(因为她可能就是去上大学的，所以觉得所有人也都如此)，偏激。此外，第四句论述变成了英语环境了(因为大家都去英语国家，所以主观认为，所有出国的人就是去学英语的)，再次带来了内容偏激。 大家找问题的时候是不是去找语法或者词汇使用上面的错误了?对，很多时候大家认为自己写的没什么问题(毕竟词汇和语法没少使用)，分数低会归类到“压分”。那么在感受一下5.5分的原因真是词汇或者语法问题吗?考官看不懂，就是看不懂;唯一看懂的就是结构还算完整，所以5.0 - 5.5分。 雅思写作提高第二步：逻辑(6.0 - 6.5) 逻辑部分的主要得分点有两个：一个是观点的准确性;一个是论证方法的灵活使用。我们根据刚才的5.0 - 5.5分的文章，进一步感受一下有了逻辑的内容有什么区别。 问题：出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad) Tim老师改：One reason for those who decide to go overseas for study is that they believe they can have access to different educational resources. That is to say, different countries have different educational system, and they can provide people with their specialized courses and rich resources to their needs and requirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that living in a foreign environment and being affected by local culture make people learn a language more quickly. 解析：Tim老师通过修改了上面同学的问题，把内容变得更准确、有说服力。所以，5.5 - 6.0分的一个最佳提分方式就是学会总结归纳自己要说的内容;否则，只是通过词汇或者语法是很难提高分数的(大家可以感受一下自己当下的学习方式就知道了)。 雅思写作第三步：语言(7+) 小站雅思君进一步给大家感受一下7.0分的标准又和上面的内容有什么区别。 问题：出国留学的优点 (the advantages of disadvantag