3.中考写作第二章：记人记事.ppt

假期会做的事： Sun bath 日光浴 Build a sand castle 做沙堡 Take a picture 照相 surf 冲浪 Buy a souvenir 买纪念品 Ride a jet ski 骑水上摩托 Scuba diving 潜水 Windsurf 玩帆船 Sleep on a hammock 睡吊床 Go sightseeing Go mountain-climbing Try the ferry tour Go to the amusement park ….. 16分版本 First， we went to the beach. We swam in the sea and sunbathed. It is so good. 分析：内容过于平淡，没有亮点，短句过多，还有语法错误。 满分版本 We first spent a whole day on the beach swimming and sunbathing， which was so enjoyable that nobody wanted to leave the beach at the end of the day. 分析：句子结构精炼，使用分词做伴随状语，so…that结构，非限的使用添亮点。同时为后面铺垫。 16分版本 Next，we w