【大学英语四级真题】2011年6月英语四级真题解析+听力原文.pdfVIP

【大学英语四级真题】2011年6月英语四级真题解析+听力原文

2011年6月英语四级考试真题详细解析

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DoingShoppingOnline

WiththedevelopmentoftheInternet,shoppingisnolongeratiring

thing.Justclickyourmousetochoosethearticlesyoulike,andthe

purchaseisdone.Youdontevenhavetostepoutoftheroom.Itseemsall

easyandquick.

However,peoplesopinionsvaryonthistrend.Somebelievethatonline

shoppingistimeandmoneysaving.Withplentifulselectionoptions,theycan

buywhatevertheylikeatanytimeconvenient.Stillothersinsistthatmis-

purchasingaloneisannoyingenough,nottomentionthecredibilityofthe

sellersandthesafetyoftheiraccounts.

Inmyopinion,theconvenienceandexcitementofonlineshoppingis

beyondalldoubts.Inthemeantime,wemustalwaysbearinmindthatcertain

trapsdoexist,sowedbettermakesurethesellersaretrustworthybefore

buying.Inaddition,weshouldalsoguardourselvesfromthepotential

hackerswhomightstealouraccountinformation.

文章点评：

这是一篇中等偏上”的学生作文.本文先对网购热潮进行简介,引出全篇;接着对网

络购物的正反两方面进行对比;最后提出自己的看法结束全篇.整体看思路清晰,逻辑严密,行

文流畅,用语较为地道.

下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处：

1.文章结构上,能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的三段式”(提出问题、分析问题、

解决问题).但是,以WiththedevelopmentoftheInternet”为开首语,有些落入俗套,有

硬套模板的嫌疑.稍加注意,应该能写出更好的句子.

2.微观语言点方面,有些语句稍显啰嗦,比如Withplentifulselectionoptions…

简化成Withplentifulselections…更好,意思没有丝毫减损,表达力反而增强许多.

高分版

Withthehelpoftheeverrapiddevelopmentofinternettechnology,

onlineshoppingiscomingintofashioninmostofcities.

Onlineshoppingiswelcomedbymostpeopleduetovariousreasons.From

theperspectiveofconsumer,itcansavesometimeforpeoplewhodonthave

muchsparetime.Justclickthemouse,theycangetwhatevertheywantwhile

stayingathome.Fortheretailers,itcancutsomecostsforthosewhodont

havemuchcirculatingfunds.Theydonthavetorentahouseandspendmoney

onemployeescom