读后续写通过一把琴，一次活动重拾希望与自信 成长励志类.pptx

通过一把琴，一次活动重拾希望与自信成长励志类

;原文分析;1、原文审读：;Thenextdaythedirectortoldmetheywouldhaveamusicshowatthecitycentreandinvitedmetogowiththemtogetfamiliarwitheverythingintheorchestra.Iarrivedearlythatdayanddecidedtowanderaround.AsIpastabookstore,asignmademestopshort:SchumacherViolinMaker.Isteppedinside.Stringedinstrumentshungfromtheceiling.Attheverycornerlayanoldviolin,whichdrewmyattention.Itremindedmeofmygrandfather’s.Anoldermaninabrowncoatsatataworktable,lookingcarefullyoverthetopofhisglassesasheadjustedthebridgeonaviolin.

“It’sfunnyInoticedyourshoptoday,”Isaidandtoldhimmystory.

“So,youneedaviolin,”hesaidwhenI’dfinished,raisingabushyeyebrow.

“Doyouhappentorentthem?”

注意：1．续写词数应为150左右：2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Heshookhishead.“ButIdohavesomething,”hesaid.

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Standinginthecitycenterwiththemusicians,Istartedtoplaytheoldviolin.

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;2、原文审读红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为embody；注释(定语从句);;故事山模式：;;高考英语读后续写分析;分析角度;;;3.续写推荐语料;常见单词高级替换：;4.高中语法和搭配现象;;写作高分技法;;PossibleAnswer1语法点和写作词汇升级项;PossibleAnswer2语法点和写作词汇升级项;语法亮点：

-使用倒装句：“NeverhadIfeltsoconnectedtothemusic.”

-定语从句的使用：“Thecityaroundmeseemedtoblur,thenoiseofthestreetsfadedintothebackground.”

情绪描写亮点：

-音乐带来的安抚：“Themusicfilledmewithasenseofcalm…”

-自信的重建：“Forthefirsttime,Ifeltadeepconnectiontothem.”

动作描写亮点

-对音乐的专注：“Icouldfeelthetensioninmybodymeltaway.”

-和乐团的互动：“Iglancedattheothermusicians,eachabsorbedinthemusic…”

高级替换词：

-“meltaway”→“dissipate,vanish”

-“deep”→“profound,intense”;;