13 情感描写——喜悦.pptVIP

5.读语言，把握语言特色原文中的语言特色：(1)v.-ing分词短语结构Thenurses,complainingaboutworkingChristmas,turnedtosympathyforafamilyjusttryingtogetwarmonChristmas.(2)with复合结构Sheturnedand,withasmile,guidedherchildrenintothewaitingroom.(3)定语从句Quiet,thatis,exceptfornurseswhowerestandingaroundthenurses’stationcomplainingabouthavingtoworkonChristmasDay,forpeopleweresupposedtobespendingtimewiththeirfamilies,exchanginggiftsandwishes.第二步，依据首句，构思框架1.读懂两段首句第一段首句译文：________________________第二段首句译文：________________________第一段框架：____________________________第二段框架：____________________________圣诞节这天，医院食堂免费给我们提供一顿饭，当派对结束，一家人走到门口准备离开时，准备派对、派对的过程。派对结束后一家人与护士告别的情景。该续写的段首句都是以“,”逗号结尾，应注意结合前句内容进行延伸。第一段首句后的衔接句：第一段尾句(须与第二段首句衔接)：2.写好三个衔接句soweclaimedthatmealandpreparedabanquetforourChristmasguests.Duringtheparty,wesang,dancedandplayedgames,whichmadeallofusgrinfromeartoearbrightlythewholetime.第二段首句后的衔接句：themothercametome,gavemeahugandwhispered,“Thanksforbeingourangelstoday.”3.写好一个升华句即第二段的尾句(即文尾句)。能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们的启示的句子：Insidethenursestation,therestoodagroupofnurseswithtearsintheireyes,whoworkedtocopewithaChristmasemergencyonthisspecialChristmasDaytoofferwarmthandsweetnesstothoseinneed.第三步，增加细节，展开续写基于第一段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节：准备派对的动作描写(________________)→派对上的场景描写(____________________)→派对结束时的心理描写(_____________)准备晚餐、礼物等唱歌、跳舞和玩游戏心情愉快基于第二段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节：告别时母亲的动作描写(____________________)→告别时孩子们的动作描写(____________________)→护士们的情感描写(_________________)落泪、拥抱、感谢“我”满脸笑容、挥手告别眼含泪水第四步，检查优化，整洁誊写Paragraph1：WewereallofferedafreemealinthehospitalcafeteriaonChristmasDay,soweclaimedthatmealandpreparedabanquetforourChristmasguests.Andweputtogethercandies,fruitsandothersnacksavailablefromdifferentapartmentsaspresents.Rushinginandoutofthewaitingroom,ourteammadegreateffortstoholdawarm