WQ高中三年级英语开 放性写作.pptVIP

writing 写作常见错误： 1 动词与主语关系不清 误：I saw an old man going out of City Park and was about to cross Park Road. 正：I saw an old man going out of City Park and he was about to cross Park Road. 误：But the car ran off immediately instead of stopping to apologize to the man. 正：But the driver drove off immediately instead of stopping to apologize to the man. 误：The park should charge the entrance fee. 正：The entrance fee should be charged for parks. 正：People should pay for the entrance fee if they go to the parks 画蛇添足 、过多的长句使句子复杂化（语言不简洁） 修改前 Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. The air pollution is becoming more and more serious which is caused by buses and cars. What’s more, so many rivers are polluted by dirty water which is from factory. In addition, sandstorm struck us now and then, from which we suffered a lot. 修改后 Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. As a result, people have to suffer sandstorms now and then. What’s more, as buses and cars give off a lot of poisonous gases, the air is getting dirtier and dirtier. Moreover, there are many rivers polluted by dirty water from factories. The situation is becoming more and more serious. 过于简单的句子使文章缺少逻辑 性，可读性。 修改前 Yesterday, there was a policeman in the street. He stopped a car. The car was at the corner. It looked like a Honda. There was a boy on the sidewalk. He was riding his bicycle. The bicycle was a two-wheeler. The car nearly knocked down the boy. 修改后 Yesterday, a policeman stopped a car—Honda at the corner of the street, because it nearly knocked down a boy who was riding a two-wheel bicycle on the sidewalk. 请你根据下面图表用英语写一篇短文，内容要包括以下两方面： 1。概括说明中美大学生的主要收入来源。 2。分析产生这种不同现象的可能原因。 Income * American *Chinese sources *students *students ---------------------------------------------- Parents *50% *90% ----------------------------------------------- Part-time jobs * 35%