【高中课件】高考英语写作技巧点拨系列六.pptVIP

写作技巧点拨系列(六) 打造写作亮点, 提升写作档次 【典例呈现】 阅读下例，体会其中高级词汇和句式的使用。 　　(2014·屯溪模拟)尽管父母爱我如初，但随着年龄的增长，眼界的开阔，对父母的期待也有所不同，请以“ Perfect Parents in My Mind”为题写一篇120个词左右的短文，谈谈理想中的父母应该是什么样的。 Perfect Parents in My Mind 　　My parents are concerned about everything about me:　what to eat and wear, who to make friends with, what hobbies to have. . . But I am an adult now. I do want to make my own decisions and lead my own life. 　　Therefore, I do wish they would allow me to make decisions sometimes. I wish they’d understand that working hard to prepare for university does not mean reading textbooks and doing a sea of exercises only; other activities also count, like sports, music and extensive reading. I wish they would take me as equal; they would include me in any decision making in the family, for I’m a member and should have my voice heard. 　　I hope that my parents not only love me, but trust me, and understand me as well. 【核心点拨】 　　提升写作档次的窍门就是增加文章中的亮点句式，打造亮点句子，巧妙布局谋篇。具体做法： 1. 词汇的选择和使用要多样性 词汇的选择要新颖独到，在有把握的前提下，使用在阅读中碰到的高级词汇，相信阅卷者会对你的文章刮目相看。试体会下列句子黑体部分被括号中的高级词汇替代后的效果。 ①About the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed？(As for) ②Some of my classmates are for the move. (in favor of) 2. 语言结构要丰富、多变 在确保行文准确流畅的前提下，需要文字清新简练，语句灵活多变，以使文章的语言结构更加丰富多彩。 ①删减赘言。 删减不必要的词，句子会显得明快干练，焕发新的生机。试体会删去黑体部分后的效果。 It took several months of hard work to complete the project. ②用介词或名词代替动词或从句。 试体会黑体部分被括号中的词替代后的效果。 The flat has an area of 100 square metres and there is a bedroom, a bathroom, and a kitchen. (with) ③使用短语结构来简化从句或合并短句。常见的结构有介词短语、名词短语、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、同位语等。 I’ll write to you the moment I arrive in Beijing. →On my arrival in Beijing, I’ll write to you. ④通过合并，将意义相关的几个句子用一定的连接方式连接起来，或通过紧缩，去掉一些多余的成分，可以避免句子冗长累赘，松散无力，使句子凝炼，层次清晰。 I can follow my own interests. I can read books, visit museums and take computer lessons. →I can follow my own interests, such as reading books, visiting museums and taking computer lessons. ⑤增加复杂句式，改变“主谓宾”的简单句，换上句中的其他成分，或有意识地使用一些特殊效果的定语从句、倒装句、强调句、