《《写作160篇》2016年考研英语写作练习修改与点评-考公务员热.》.doc

各位研友： 大家好！ 附件中是部分考研1号读者朋友们根据考研1号系列图书相关话题所作的写作练习。里面附有考研1号编辑所作的具体点评与修改意见，希望大家在日常写作练习中能积极的学习吸收这些读者作文中的优点以及不足，对比自己写作中存在的一些细节问题，从而在以后自己写作练习中积极改进类似的错误，学习其中好的写作思路与写作句式。 考研1号编辑们提醒大家，在进行写作练习的时候，切莫单纯的追求写作数量，以期达到写作能力的提高，量的积累是必须的，但是我们更要注重每一篇写作需要在前一篇写作的基础上去练习，而不是所有的写作都基于同样的水平，犯同样的错误，这样的话，大家会感觉自己练习了很多篇写作，但是水平依然没有提高的困惑。鉴于此，考研1号编辑们提醒大家，可以就一个话题，进行写作，反复修改，逐步提高，循序渐进的写作思路才是正确的，可取的，经过自己一遍又一遍的思考，你会发现自己每一次修改都会提升，就像考研1号一位读者发送邮件告诉编辑们，自己认真总结了前面的作文点评与修改意见之后，认真的去写作，发现自己把作文输入电脑的过程也是学习提升的过程，邮件中说道“我想说一下，在我在电脑上打字，并给您发作文的感受，这篇文章在纸上写的时候，并不如现在这样完整，后来在打字的过程中，又是对自己写的作文的整理以及优化的过程，本来之前不会写的地方或者是没有思路的地方，不知怎的，有了灵感，我非常享受这个过程，而且感觉也挺有帮助的。” 考研1号编辑们衷心希望大家能从写作练习中有所收获，享受写作的过程，也是我们写作能力提升的积极心理因素。祝愿大家能以一个积极乐观的心态复习备考。 【写作原文】考研英语话题图画作文《写作160篇》之“”话题读者写作练习 ???? As is vividly betrayed in this picture,many people are stretching out their hands vie with each other toseize one single chair which is higly upon their heads.After a careful examination on this picture,the chairwe know presents the position of pubilc servant. ???? The picutre aims at alarming us a severe problem in our society today,that is,employment has become a prominent issue.There are many reasons contribute to this phenomenon.First,with the rapid incresing of graduates and decreasing mount of poses,a significant number of these graduates cannot be employed. For another,not being satisfied with which they serve the current job,for who are eager to is of high salary and easy work.Last but not least,the position of pubile servant job is easy and lucrative which will eventually lead to a significant trend that numerous of college students apply for the nationwide government recruitment exam. As for futher expanding the need of employment,university students should first get a job in the long run for being able to develop their experience.Whats more,the government concerned should balance the divergence beyond different industries in the field of treatment. ? 【范文点评】 【第一段点评】? As is vividly betrayed in this picture,many people are stretching out their hands vi