2015年高考英语大一轮复习 写作技巧点拨系列（六）课件 新人教版必修3.pptVIP

写作技巧点拨系列(六) 打造写作亮点, 提升写作档次 【典例呈现】 阅读下例, 体会其中高级词汇和句式的使用。 (2014·屯溪模拟)尽管父母爱我如初, 但随着年龄的增长, 眼界的开阔, 对父母的期待也有所不同, 请以“Perfect Parents in My Mind”为题写一篇120个词左右的短文, 谈谈理想中的父母应该是什么样的。 Perfect Parents in My Mind My parents are concerned about everything about me: what to eat and wear, who to make friends with, what hobbies to have. . . But I am an adult now. I do want to make my own decisionsandlead my own life. Therefore, I do wishthey would allow me to make decisions sometimes. I wish they’d understand that working hard to prepare for university does not mean reading textbooks and doing a sea of exercises only; other activities also count, like sports, music and extensive reading. I wish they would take me as equal; they would include me in any decision making in the family, for I’m a member and should have my voice heard. I hope that my parents not only love me, but trust me, and understand me as well. 【核心点拨】 提升写作档次的窍门就是增加文章中的亮点句式, 打造亮点句子, 巧妙布局谋篇。 1. 词汇的选择和使用要多样性 词汇的选择要新颖独到, 在有把握的前提下, 使用在阅读中碰到的高级词汇, 相信阅卷者会对你的文章刮目相看。试体会下列句子黑体部分被括号中的高级词汇替代后的效果。 ①About the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed? (As for) ②Some of my classmates are for the move. (in favor of) 2. 语言结构要丰富、多变 在确保行文准确流畅的前提下, 需要文字清新简练, 语句灵活多变, 以使文章的语言结构更加丰富多彩。 ①删减赘言。 删减不必要的词, 句子会显得明快干练, 焕发新的生机。试体会删去黑体部分后的效果。 It took several months of hard work to complete the project. ②用介词或名词代替动词或从句。 试体会黑体部分被括号中的词替代后的效果。 The flat has an area of 100 square metres and there is a bedroom, a bathroom, and a kitchen. (with) ③使用短语结构来简化从句或合并短句。常见的结构有介词短语、名词短语、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、同位语等。 I’ll write to you the moment I arrive in Beijing. →On my arrival in Beijing, I’ll write to you. ④通过合并, 将意义相关的几个句子用一定的连接方式连接起来, 或通过紧缩, 去掉一些多余的成分, 可以避免句子冗长累赘, 松散无力, 使句子凝炼, 层次清晰。 I can follow my own interests. I can read books, visit museums and take computer lessons. →I can follow my own interests, such as reading books, visiting museums and taking computer lessons. ⑤增加复杂句式, 改变“主谓宾”