小升初作文评讲家庭成员介绍重点分析.pptVIP

短文写作评讲（一）家庭成员介绍篇 单词拼写错误： grandfa present bueatiful grandprents worm grandfather grandpa parents beautiful grandparents warm 短语表达错误 1.my family photo【大部分同学】 2.I am middle of my grandparents.【齐嘉宁】 3.she is about 87-years-old.【齐嘉宁】 I am five old years.【杨铭】 4.He likes drink tea and draw pictures. He very likes science.【张晋祥】 5.She is a hand teacher.【张晋祥】 6.He sometimes comes to home.【张雅雯】 a photo of my family in the middle of .... 87 years old 87-year-old +n. like doing sth. headteacher 句型表达错误 1.My mother is sit beside my father. 2. Im stay near the two old people. 3.My grandma is left for me. 4.This is my family it warm and happy. 5. I love my family, love my father and mother, love my familys everything ,too. 6.My grandmother is no work. 7.They are like playing chess very much. 刘畅、王序瑶 1.There is my father,my mother,my grandmother,my grandfather and I. 2. My grandmother is on my left, she is very old, she is about 87 years old. 3.The young woman is my mother,she is very beautiful. 4.The top of two people are my parents.表达有误 齐嘉宁 周意 标点符号大问题 1.He often with my to playing. 2. He very hardly. 3.My grandmother very funny. 4.And be front of me is my father and mother. 5.Near me is my old present. 张家燃 孔令通 朱雨悦 这样的表达，老师也是醉了.... 主谓一致问题 1.He often go to the other country.【张雅雯】 2.I am is student.【张雅雯】 3.The two old people is my grandmother and grand father. 【张一萌、张家燃】 4.She often cook a lot of food for me.【张家燃】 5.I am a students.【张晋祥】 短文写作评讲（二）好友介绍篇 单词拼写错误： listeing 【张家燃】 favourit【张雅雯】 quite【刘畅】 kindly【周意】 hes hobby 【齐嘉宁】 diffcult【周意】 listening favo(u)rite quiet kind his hobby difficult 主格、宾格、形代傻傻分不清...... 1.I like she very much.【张一萌】 2.He best hobby is play football.【张家燃】 3.He name is Pater.【杨铭】 4. Her looks very nice.Her likes running,swimming......【张雅雯】 4.She is taller than I. She favourite subject is maths.【朱雨悦】 her His favorite hobby is playing.... His she me Her 单三，又是单三....总是记不住！ 1.She feel the math a