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改写文章例子 Paraphrasing Original: On the whole, people are healthier, wealthier and live longer today than 30 years ago. If children were still dying at 1978 rates, there would have been 16.2 million deaths globally in 2006. In fact, there were only 9.5 million such deaths9. This difference of 6.7 million is equivalent to 18,329 children?s lives being saved every day. The once revolutionary notion of essential drugs has become commonplace. There have been significant improvements in access to water, sanitation and antenatal care. Reference:The World Health Report 2008 - primary Health Care (Now More Than Ever) Paraphrased: As indicated in ?The World Health Report 2008-primary Health Care(Now More Than Ever)?, it is can be seen that people have already become healthier, wealthier with a longer life expectancy than that in 30 years ago. If the death rate were the same with that in 1978, there would be 16.2 million children die globally in 2006. Fortunately, the number of death was only 9.5 million, in fact. There is a significant difference between the two numbers, because the 6.7 million children?s lives consist of 18,329 lives being saved everyday. Because the revolutionary notion of essential drugs become wildly accepted by citizens, as well as the access to water, sanitation and antenatal care have been greatly improved. 篇二：作文修改示例 “等待花开”全篇作文修改示例 作文题目：阅读下面的文字，按要求作文。 英国少年艾金森长得憨头憨脑，行为举止笨拙而幼稚，是同学们的戏弄对象，老师们也不愿给他上课。走上社会的艾金森因那憨厚十足的脸和笨拙而幼稚的举止找不到工作。只有他的母亲认为他是优秀的。一天，母亲指着花园里的各种花草说：“每种花都有开放的机会，那些还没有开放的，只是未到季节。花草在未遇到适合自己开放的季节时，需吸收养分和阳光，储蓄足够的能量，等待属于自己的季节来临。??” 后来，艾金森尽管好长时间依然碰壁，但他没有气馁，牢记住了母亲的话。直到英国《非9点新闻》剧组的导演发现了他，让他饰演“憨豆先生”，他迅速走红，成为一名世界顶级的喜剧演员。 请以“等待花开”为题目，自定立意，自选文体，写一篇不少于800字的文章。 审题指导：审题应紧紧抓住母亲的一番话和艾金森的经历；并正确理解题中的关键词“花开”“等待”——“花开”是人生的机遇、事业的成功，也可以是误解的消除、感情的获得，还可以是国际的安定、世界的和平??总之，现实人生、宇宙世界中美好事物的获得都可看作“花开”，关键还是看习作中如何转换、如何展开；“等待”是一种不断学习、追求理想、努力奋斗、蓄积能量、沉淀素养、塑造自我的过程，也可以是一种美好的的憧憬、乐观的心态、坚定的信念，但绝不是消极 的坐等、无谓的幻想。写作时应着眼于“花开”，落脚于“等待”，把二者有机地结合起来，当然侧重点应在“等待”。 病文： 等待花开 没有开放的花,是未遇到