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山寨文化： 写作原文 The picture describes a?prevailing?phenomenon that the copycating 改为copycatting products is 改为are become more and more populat 拼写错误，改为popular . In the picture the man painting 句子缺谓语，改为is painting the vase which 此处用定语从句不合适，建议改为and his mind is fulled 改为full，be full of为固定短语 of money, 逗号改为句号，然后加There are large of fake products behind with 去掉with，behind本身为介词，后面不用再加其他介词 him .That may created 改为creat，may为情态动词，情态动词后面跟动词原形 a cultural 改为the culture, cultural为形容词，此处应该为名词，再者，culture为不可数名词，不能用a修饰 so called 改为which is so called copycating 拼写错误，改为copycatting culture 注意句末加句号 Slow growing 改为Slow-growing fish are outlive than fast growing one 改为fast-growing ones . Make money we should choice choice为名词，此处需要动词，改为choose a batter 去掉a，将batter改为better ways 汉语式英语，整句话可改为If we want to make money, we should choose a better way . In our social 改为名词形式society ,people always saw 改为see,always常与现在时态连用 the money as their primary reason for being. No matter 改为Whether you are a businessman or producter 改为a producer they make money be anxious to achieve quick success and get instant benefits 汉语式英语，改为you will be anxious when you achieve quick success or?get instant benefits , 注意断句 they make money by a wrong means like copy the well goods what sell well 汉语式英语，无逻辑，改为They want to make money by wrong means, for example, they copy the goods which sell well ,whats more, producters 拼写错误，改为producers producting 注意词性的正确选择，改为produce goodsin low capture 改为with a low cost or added 改为add poisonous 加things，poisonous为形容词，用来修饰名词 in food,how terrible it is , 注意断句 that way to product food harmful with people 表达有误，改为and it is harmful for people .Obviously the events of sanlu 汉语拼音首字母要大写，用斜体，改为Sanlu milk powder 改为which contains vc powder it 去掉 can be said babys disaste 改为disaster ,many knock-off 意思用于此处不正确，改为producers didnt 文章时态整体保持一致，改为dont conform with official safety standards .Recently,the event about copycating 拼写错误，改为copycatting iphone charger result in user die rise people care about