雅思写作范文-学童电脑_雅思写作.docxVIP

智课网IELTS备考资料雅思写作范文:学童电脑_雅思写作 三篇比较：考官+猫头鹰+烤鸭 英文作文：造句第一论证第二 一位考官所写的例子可以视为模范答案。答题的方式很多，请注意这一篇范文只是其中一个极好的例子。（This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.） 雅思大作文真题（IELTS Writing Task 2） You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at leas 250 words. 考官的回答：五段58-51-47-75-42字，总共273字。全文12句，只有一句是简单句。其余都是复杂句，复合句。 猫头鹰闲话：考官范文——值得欣赏模仿其造句与论证，不可钻牛角尖其布局结构。盲目崇拜考官范文的思路，则纯属多余，也未必来电。其实，浏览任何英语读物都能能为写作充电。不少人的毛病在于不懂得通电写作，难怪写作时不来电。至于考生阅读单项表现超强，往往弱项却是写作，这完全是因为写作锻炼不够。 看考官范文或任何优秀范文都有不同的参考价值。各类范文看多看久了，谁都好像会当讲师，但考前动手练习的经验不够。再说，即使写作参考书买得再多，也绝对买不到实战经验。就如同说，熟读驾驶规则是一回事，真正在路上行驶又是另外一回事。【知】与【行】之间的距离难测。 仿写范文也是锻炼写作的方法之一。将你喜欢的【句子】与【论点】做笔记，学而时习之不亦说乎。范文的结构未必篇篇都适合你的思路开展，所以不一定值得仿效。猫头鹰认为范文的布局虽然因人而异，然而务必遵守基本的【起承转合】——循规蹈矩不逾矩。 起》第一段考官引言 复杂句 1. I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day.（第一句话：申论主题。同意试题的立场--学童过分专注电脑，产生不良影响。） 复杂句 2. This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long time can be damaging to both the eyes and physical posture of a young child, regardless of what they are using the computer for.（第二句话：考官并没有明显的指引出中体段落的论证方向。考官妙在指出无论电脑的用途如何，如果天天久久坐在银幕前面，对于幼童的眼睛和身体有害。这一点，在中体三段中，并没有按牌面发展下去。注意到引言中一针见血，看不到呕心的鹦鹉句子，如“铜板有两面”，“有人认为，也有人认为，至于我个人则认为，”——陈腐废话。） 承》第二段考官中体段A 复杂句 1. However, the main concern is about the type of computer activities that affect children.（指标句：topic sentence） 复杂句 2. These are often electronic games that tend to be very intense and rather violent. 复合句 3. The player is usually the hero of the game and too much exposure can encourage children to be self-centered and insensitive to others. 转》第三