2016-3-30-写作现象说明文-王丽聪.pptVIP

写作反馈之 现象说明文 信宜中学 高三集备组 王丽聪 写作训练： 假如你是李华，要参加一次关于环保话题的演讲比赛。最近一段时间我国多个地方出现雾霾天气，极大地影响了人们的健康与生活。因此你想以此为话题，写一篇演讲稿。应包括以下要点： 1. 现象描述； 2. 对生活造成的影响； 3. 所采取的措施. 要求：1.词数 100左右； 2.开头已给出，不计入总词数. 参考词汇：雾霾haze 雾霾天气hazy weather ① ② ③ ④ ② ③ 23分：沈佳凤、龙婵 22分：陆金滢、李丹桃、刘松林、周懿雯 Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen. I’m Li Hua. I feel greatly honored to be here to tell you something about environmental protection. Recently, the hazy weather has occurred in many places of China, which has a bad impact on people’s lives. For example, it influences the traffic, which leads to many accidents because of the low-visibility. What’s more, it is harmful to our health. Under this circumstance, I would like to put forward some suggestions. First, it is our obligation to keep our environment clean. Second, we need to try out best to reuse as much recyclable material as possible in daily life. If everyone is committed to acting, there single efforts will accumulate into a collective life. Yours, Li Hua 高考英语作文评分标准 评分时，应注意的主要内容为： 1. 书写（卷面整洁、篇幅饱满、条理清晰） 2.内容要点齐全 3.应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性 4.上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。 Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen. I’m Li Hua. I feel greatly honored to be here to tell you something about environmental protection. Recently, the hazy weather has occurred in many places of China, which has a bad impact on people’s lives. For example, it influences the traffic, which leads to many accidents because of the low-visibility. What’s more, it is harmful to our health. Under this circumstance, I would like to put forward some suggestions. First, it is our obligation to keep our environment clean. Second, we need to try out best to reuse as much recyclable material as possible in daily life. If everyone is committed to acting, there single efforts will accumulate into a collective life. Yours, Li Hua 龙婵 General analysis 对照自己试卷，检查是否符合卷面整洁、篇幅饱满、条理清晰的要求。（1s’） 语言表达 Common err