[高中英语写作扩句.docVIP

扩句的方法 在学习扩句法之前，先对学生进行五个简单句句型，并列句和复合句的专项训练，打好基础。扩句是在基本句型的基础上，添加各种修饰成，使句子得到扩展，即根据表达的需求增加定语，状语，同位语等成分，或者举例子补充细节内容，或者添加谚语俗语等。 1. We arrived in Sanya. ----- We arrived in Sanya, happily and excitedly. (添加副词) 2. I like to make friends with my classmates. ------ I like to make friends with my classmates, who have the same interest as mine. (添加定语从句) 3. We were happy and returned home. ------- We were happy and returned home after we had finished collecting all the rubbish.(添加状语从句) 4. I like reading books. ------- I like reading books, such as novels, short stories, magazines and newspapers.(通过举例补充细节) 5. We should study hard. -------- As we all know, “Practice makes perfect”. So we should study hard.（添加谚语） 6. I often join in many activities. -------- I often join in many activities in order to communicate with other students and broaden my mind. (添加目的状语) 三． 具体应用 试题要求：假如你是一名中学生，请以My colorful school life为题，写一篇短文。要求100个字左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总数。 要点提示：1：上课认真听讲 2：课后完成作业 3：经常参加体育锻炼 4：去图书馆阅读 I’m a high school student and I understand what I’m studying for. I have been working hard. _______________________________________________________________________________ May there always be colorful life around my school. 学生的习作： I’m a high school student and I understand what I’m studying for. I have been working hard. I listen to the teacher carefully. I finish my homework after class. I often take exercise. I often read in the school library. May there always be colorful life around my school. 点评：该学生能完整的写出各个要点，没有出现太大的语法错误，表达通顺，单词拼写无误。但是很明显字数不够，没有达到100个字左右，字数不够是很多学生面临的共同问题。其次，句子的表达过于平淡无奇，没有句式多样化和使用高级词汇，固定搭配、固定短语等使表达地道。而且，没有使用连接词，上下文的连接不够顺畅。 改进方法： 步骤一：列要点 把要写的内容要点化，做到要点齐全。 1: Listen to the teacher carefull 2: finish my homework 3:take part in exercise 4: often read in the library 步骤二：造简单句 充分利用五个简单句句型对各个要点进行补充，使其变成一个完整的句子。每个句子都要注意句子成分的完整性，语法是否正确，说法是否符合英语表达习惯。