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2011年12月真题 Directions：For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Nothing Succeeds without a Strong Will by commenting on the humorous saying, “Quitting smoking is the easiest saying in the world. I’ve done it hundreds of times.” You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words. Model Composition Nothing Succeeds without a Strong Will 　 　　Everyone tries to achieve success in his life and career. However, someone firmly attains his goal while the other fails. Why? Because their will of success varies from each other. If keeping pursuing one’s dreams no matter what is in their way, they will finally succeed some day. 　　To take quitting smoking as an example, some regard it as a piece of cake. They make up their minds to quit it in the morning, but in the evening they feel that the smell of cigarettes is tempting. Their mouths are becoming thirsty, and their hands are shaking. After an inner struggle, they tell themselves that “One cigarette is enough, Just one, and the next day will be a new beginning. I will quit it.” By doing this, they yield to their weak will. In the end, they have quitted smoking “a hundred times”, but in no time they succeed. I believe that where there is a will there is a way and that success belongs to those who can suffer long years of patient toil and have a strong will. 写作分析： 1. 审题：这是一篇典型的观点论证型作文，需要论证的观点就是：没有坚强的意志就没有成功。可采用传统的三段论结构行文。从题目看论点有点抽象，无从下手。仔细分析题目要求可见，本题要求考生从屡次戒烟不成功的谚语出发，以此作为事例，进行更进一步分析论证。 2. 写作思路： 第一段：表明观点，提出没有坚强的意志就没有成功 第二段：引出关于吸烟的谚语，对这个事例进行进一步分析，证明观点。 第三段：总结全文，再次重申观点，照应前文。 3. 范文点评 首段开门见山，引出观点：人生中，有的人成功了，而有的人却失败了，关键在于成功意志的强弱。 第二段列举吸烟这个例子，有的人认为戒烟是很简单的事，但事实却往往事与愿违，往往早上才决定戒烟，晚上又抵制不住香烟的诱惑。论证中引用了题目列举的谚语，很好的照应的题目要求。 第三段引用谚语“where there is a will there is a way”，总结全文，指出成功需要经历长时间的磨练和坚强的意志。 2011年6月真题 Directions：For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below. 1. 现在网上购物已成为一种时尚 2. 网上购物有很多