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2016河南（洛阳市）高考英语书面表达选练（2）及参考范文 基础写作1---2题型探究 探究点一　难句的表达 　　下面我们来谈论一下基础写作的解题方法。基础写作的难点是难句的表达。每一道题目的中文内容都有一些与英文表达稍有差异甚至大相径庭的表达形式。 　　【举例说明】假设你是李华， 请根据你校美化校园的规划， 用英语给你在美国的笔友Peter写一封信， 介绍该规划。信的主要内容如下： 【写作要求】 　　1．应包含所给出的全部信息， 开头和结尾已经给出，但不计入总句数； 　　2．必须使用5个句子组成连贯的短文。 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program. . Welcome to our school if you have any chance. Yours， Li Hua 【学生样本】 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program.①In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air, we plan to have more trees in our school now.②In order to get good places to study and live, we have many plans.③First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use.④Second, we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study.⑤At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers. Welcome to our school if you have any chance. Yours， Li Hua 【评论点拨】 我们来看看学生的样本有什么地方可以改进： 　　第①句：“In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air ”比较生硬， to make our school beautiful应该改为to make our school more beautiful；“we plan to have more trees in our school now”中的have改为plant会好些。 　　第②句：没有涉及表格内的内容， 是个废句， 而且还霸占了后面的信息的位置。 　　第③句：“First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use.”中的画线部分没有表达出“供同学们参观、实践”的意思。 第④句：“Second, we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study.”中应删掉up, study后应该加上in。不过改为“Second, we plan to build a small garden in which we can take a rest and do some reading.”会好些。 　　第⑤句：“At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers.”中的effect应该改为encourage。 　　另外，这篇文章的主语全部都是we, 虽然可以最大限度地减少英语表达方面的错误， 但是比较单调， 可能影响高分。不过， 我们只要变换句式， 例如改为被动语态等， 就可以达到很好的效果。 【参考范文】 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program.The pu