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【写作任务】 快餐食品在时下很流行，尤其受青少年学生的欢迎，请以fast food为题，根据提示写一篇短文。 1．有利方面：快捷、方便，就餐环境舒适、卫生、整洁。 2．不利方面：快餐食品，营养欠佳，不利健康。 3．建议：根据情况，不宜多吃。 【写作要求】 1．可适当加入细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯； 2．词数：120～150。 【写作分析】 第一步：认真审题 一审体裁：本文要求写一篇关于快餐的小短文，是属于说明文范畴。这类文章一般都是目的明确，实事求是地把介绍的对象说明白，使人们对被说明的事物或人有一个清晰、完整的认识。 二审格式：本文不同于书信、演讲稿等问题，没有特别的格式要求。时态用一般现在时，用第二人称较合适。 三审结构：本次写作的正文可分为三部分。首先，介绍快餐很受青少年学生的欢迎。接下来，根据提示，说明快餐店为什么受欢迎。最后，再写它的不利因素，并且提出自己的建议。 第二步：提炼要点 1．become more and more popular 2．be convenient 3．take away 4．whats more 5．a balanced diet 6．as little as possible 7．keep fit 第三步：扩点成句 1．Fast food is becoming more and more popular. 2．Its very convenient and saves a lot of time. 3．Whenver you go into a fast restaurant to order your food，it is ready in no time. 4．Whats more，its very clean and it has excellent service and good quality food. 5．As we all know，its usually not a balanced diet. 6．In order to keep fit，eat fast food as little as possible. 【品味佳作】 Fast Food Fast food is becoming more and more popular，especially among children and teenagers. There are several reasons for its popularity.First，its very convenient and saves a lot of time.Whenever you go into a fast restaurant to order your food，it is ready in no time.You can take it away or eat there.Second，the atmosphere there is very comfortable.Whats more，its very clean and it has excellent service and good quality food. However，fast food is not good for peoples health，especially children.As we all know，its usually not a balanced diet.And there is too much fat in the food.So you cant get enough fresh vegetables.The price of the food there is very high. So in order to keep fit，eat fast food as little as possible.Its only a choice when you are in a hurry. 【名师点津】 1．短文言简意赅，有效地使用了过渡句，使全文逻辑严谨，结构紧凑，显示了作者较强的语言运用能力。 2．内容表述完整，详略得当，覆盖所有内容要点，完成了试题规定的任务。 3．文体正确，时态、人称运用恰当。 4．文中运用了较多的语法结构和词汇， 如especially，First...Second...，whats more...，however，also，as little as possible，in order to等衔接过渡词，特别是Whenever you go into a fast restaurant to order your food，it is ready in no time.As we al