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The person I thank most 作品评选集 By Yang Junxiao 【修改后】By Yang Junxiao There are many people that I want to thank,but my is the person I want to thank most. He has short black hair. He is very kind and easy to get along with. He likes to play basketball and football. I thank him because he always helps me with my study. One day I failed an exam and got home sadly.To my surprise, he studied my paper carefully and then taught me how to work out the problems. I was moved by my fathers behavior. From that day I work harder than before and make greater progress. I feel relaxed while learning. So my father is the person I want to thank most. By Li Mengqi I want to thank my mother most. I thank her for giving birth to me and teaching me how to be an honest person. When I was a tiny baby,she spent all her time with me. When I was hungry or tired, she cooked or gave me a hug at once. When I was ill, she worried about me and didnt sleep at night. In my heart, my mother is the most beautiful person all over the world. She has black long straight hair and two big eyes. My mother is very kind and friendly. She likes wearing the black clothes . She prefers music that is quiet and smooth. She really cares about me. I love her very much. I thank her most. 批语：内容很棒！写出了妈妈对于自己生活中的关爱，但文章的语序有所调整，细化某一件事会更棒！ 【修改后】By Li Mengqi I want to thank my mother most. She has black long straight hair and two big eyes. My mother is very kind and friendly. She likes wearing the black clothes. She prefers music that is quiet and smooth. I thank her for giving birth to me She really cares about me. One day, I caught a cold and had a high fever. She worried about me and didnt sleep at night. Those days she spent all her time with me. I got healthy quickly. From the thing I knew my mother loves me very much. I made a decision to work hard to make my mother happy . I thank her most, I hope she will be proud of me some day. By Wang siyu The person I thank most is