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考研英语【考研1号】系列图书为您提供诚挚的服务！更多考研资料获取请登录考研1号网站 《写作160篇》作文修改之“山寨文化”读者练习 写作原文 As is vividly shown in the picture, someone are（is）painting in（去掉）a vase, who is thinking about money.（非限定性定语从句是对逗号前的部分进行补充说明,且think about意为“考虑，关心”。因此此句改为：Someone, who is thinking of money, is painting a vase.） There is “shanzhai” in the surface of （加the）vase. Behind him there are several similar vases. The picture revel (使用单三且单词拼写错误，reveals) that the copycat culture become （becomes）popular nowadays. All aspects of life, We（缺少介词“in”,且注意只有位于句首的单词首字母才大写。In all aspects of life, we）can find copycat culture. Not only the media, the books, but also our daily necessities have copycat’s shadow. First and foremost, as the society becomes more and more money-oriented, people treat money as life(用people regard money as important as their own lives较好). Secondly, many person（persons） need brand but can’t afford it.（many people want to buy brand products but they can’t afford them.） Copycat is cheaper than brand, so customer buy it and businessman product it（本句可润色为：Copycat products are much cheaper than originals, which attracts thousands of customers to buy as well as a mass of businessmen to produce accordingly）. Facing the pressure now, we should takes（take）the best.（句意不完整,可改为we should spare no efforts to solve the problem.） In my personal（加view或者opinion）, it’s not just the responsibility of the government(汉式思维，可改为not only the government is duty-bound ), the public also needs to be responsible. The laws and regulation that enacted by government, are important safeguard(Laws and regulations enacted/(that are enacted) by the government are important safeguards). The public should improve their awareness that copycat is illegal. Not only does it hurt to (去掉) （加the或our）society, but（加it）also hurt (hurts) yourself (ourselves). Moreover, businessman (businessmen) can work together to create a better product（加brand） than the existing brand (用复数brands更合适). If everyone all work (works) together, it will not be a pr