山寨文化4【考研1号】修改作文之“山寨文化”读者练习.docVIP

考研英语【考研1号】系列图书为您提供诚挚的服务！更多考研资料获取请登录考研1号网站 【考研1号】修改作文之“山寨文化”读者练习 写作原文 As is shown above, in the middle of the picture stands a people（a people意为“一个民族；一个国家的人民”，改为a man或者a person）, making the crafts that we call shanzhai（加products较好）, with thinking money in his mind（语法层面没有错误，但表达不地道。可改为：with money stuffed in his head）. There has been a heated discussion above (about) the picture in the newspaper recently. Simple as the picture is, the symbolic meaning is as deep as ocean. The picture does reveal that the culture of “shanzhai” is not only harmful but also damaging. The past decade has witnessed a huge development in economy owing to reforming and opening-up policies carried out, bringing some problem (problems) at the same time, with the above one being the foremost. What’s more, the public fails to attach due attention to shanzhai. If the situation were to continue as it is, we would pay the high price. This culture waste (wastes) our hours, lavishes days and even squanders years. The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures to tackle this problem. It is imperative that corresponding laws and regulations be introduced and enforced to curb and harness this urgent problem. The public should enhance their awareness. Put it another way, it is important that we should treat it socially, economically and culturally. 总体点评 文章有一定的语法错误，但是并不影响理解，内容不充实，漏掉了相关的内容要点，属于考研作文中的第二档作文。需注意： 1. 文章最大的问题就是模仿痕迹太严重，感觉像是一篇万能模版，尤其是第二段和第三段，第二段只是把山寨文化套了进去，第三段连山寨文化都没有提到。需注意，考研英语打击模版作文，可以模仿优秀作文好的表达以及句式，总结出自己的模版。 同时，这也反应出了作者在面对话题时不知道该写什么。可以从以下几方面着手： 第一段：①描述图画、图表内容；②说明现象。 第二段: ①阐述图画含义；②解释原因；③举例说明；④阐释个人观点；⑤说明利弊等等。 第三段：①建议措施；②归纳总结；③趋势预测等等 2. 文章中有语法错误，需注意：①名词单复数，如some problem (problems)； ②主谓一致，体现在文中即动词的单三形式与复数，如This culture waste (wastes)；③介词的区分，如a heated discussion above (about) the picture。作者需注意是由于疏忽还是语法知识遗漏所致。写完后多加检查；若是知识点遗漏，则加强自己的语法基础。 3. 注意同一个单词不同意思与用法的辨析，如people。 总之，作者努力的方向在于立意和内容方面，其次逐步提高自己的英语思维。有付出就有收获，加油，祝你考研成功！ 参考分数（满分20分）：7 考研1号编辑部