3.小作文：活动类.ppt

基础写作，使用5个规范的英语句子描述全部所给的信息内容。 请根据下面提示的信息，写一篇关于你校开展“环境保护周”活动的报道。 活动目的：保护我们生存的环境。 活动时间：6月3日到6月8日 主办单位：校学生会和团委 活动内容：打扫操场，给树木花草浇水，收集旧报纸，旧书，空罐头，废玩具，分类后送回收中心。 活动意义：提高了同学们的环保意识。 During the week from June 3rd to June 8th, an activity titled Environmental Protection Week was organized by the Young League and Students’ Union of our school, with the aim of protecting our environment. During the activity , some students cleaned the playground, and watered the young trees and flowers. Moreover, others collected waste paper, old books, empty cans and old toys. Besides, they had them sorted and sent them to the recycling center. Thanks to the activity, we all have realized how important protecting the environment is. 2008年深圳第一次调研 假设你参加了你校组织的 “关爱生命携手‘艾滋’儿童”的活动。请你根据以下信息，写一篇英文日记，叙述活动情况。[写作内容]活动安排内容 1．时 间：2011年11月12日 星期六8：30 启程，共进午餐后返回2．地 点：校门口集中，一个半小时自行车车程  目的地：红十字会医院3．活 动：亲切交谈、牵手跳舞、赠送礼物、拍照留念4. 你的感受 …… 审题： 第一步：确定时态！！！ 第二步：体裁？信息应该按什么逻辑连接？ 日记（记述文），小作文不用用日记格式，但是大作文就要。 按时间顺序写，不用first这类简单逻辑词 存在问题 1. 信息安排混乱，按表格直译，且审题不清 A half hour ride, send gifts 2. 漏点；活动主题没有大写 Bike, titled Show Our Love and Take Their Hands titled “Show our love and take their hands” 3. 死套句型： 没有要求写purpose, 就不用写！！！ 4. 欠感受或as well as 的用法 We talked as well as dancing with them… take more attention and careness on… 5. 大量拼写问题 Crossing, togather, photoes，knowledges, ativity… Today is the World Aids Day, so an activity titled organized “Take care of our lives, hand in hand with Aids children” by our school (总：活动、组织、时间) At 8:30 this morning, volunteers gathered at the school gate and started our bike trip. （启程） After a one and a half hours ride on bicycle, no sooner had we got to the Red Cross Hospital than we began to have close chats with Aids children to see how their life is going, and then we danced happily hand in hand. （活动1） Having become friends with each other, our gifts were presented, lots of photos were taken in memory of this meaningful activity and w