半命题类.ppt

重新塑造我们的生活(reshape our life) 方便快捷(convenient and efficient) 处理紧急事情(deal with emergencies) 加速生活节奏(accelerate/ speed up the pace of life) 拉近了人们之间的距离(shorten the distance between people) 克服地域的障碍(overcome geographical barrier) 有教育意义的(instructive) 广泛使用计算机(a widespread use of computers) 神奇的功能( marvelous functions) 准确性 (accuracy) 快速地完成任务(accomplish the task perfectly), 提高了工作效率(achieve the high efficiency) 草稿（提纲） 草稿（提纲） 三.半命题类文章结尾部分（重申主题，总结升华）： 如何写结尾呢？ ? Even though it sounds impractical, never should we lose heart to strive for our common goal—world peace. (peace maker) All in all, if possible, I want to invent an air bus in order to make our life better. (air bus) I really want to invent a time machine like this to create happiness and reduce sorrow in the world! I hope my dream can come true one day! (Time machine) 开头16分版本 As to the topic，I want to invent a time management robot . 分析：做开头没有亮点，只能得基本分。 开头18分版本 Nowadays， with the development of the economy，I think it’s necessary for me to invent a time management robot . 分析: 有亮词：nowadays;有亮词组 with the development of the economy, 形势主语 。 开头满分版本 ?As we all know, time and tide waits for no man. Recently, I find that an expanding number of people begin to focus on the significance of time management. So I want to invent a robot which will help us to make full advantage of time. 用了谚语；明确引出主题；用了定语从句。 结尾16分版本 Therefore，it’s important for us to invent a time management robot. 分析：没有语法错误，但是不够亮，不够有感情，没有提升感。 结尾18分版本 As a result，time is valuable. Inventing a time management robot should be on top of the list. 评论：这里使用了as a result表示连接的短语，又用动名词做主语. 结尾满分版本 Time is something that once lost and you could never have again. Therefore, the time management robot is a necessity and never put off till tomorrow what may be done today.?? 分析：呼应主题，用了谚语结尾，由提升感。 本章索引 ★考点分析 ★写作四步走法 ◆破题 ◆草稿 ◆写作 ◆检查 ★作文练习 检查(请给下列文章纠错) With the rapid developing of science and technology , I want to invent an air bus if possibly. First of all, people of t