王晓薇writing.ppt

* * * * 2 Learning procedures Comments on your homework (作业评讲） Tips on how to make your sentences better (技巧指导） 3 Practice makes perfect (巩固复习） 1 Comments on your homework Basic Writing 第一节：基础写作 以下是一本图书的基本信息及相关报道 基本信息： ⑴书名：Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother ⑵作者：Amy Chua，美籍华人，耶鲁大学教授 ⑶出版时间：2010年 ⑷内容：作者用中国传统方式教育两个女儿的故事 ⑸效应：引发中美教育方式孰优孰劣的讨论 相关报道： ⑴中文版：2011年初开始在中国销售 ⑵意外反应：多数中国妈妈不赞同作者的做法 ⑶最新消息：17岁的大女儿已被哈佛和耶鲁录取 耶鲁：Yale 哈佛：Harvard 写作中常见的错误 1.只有从句，没有主句 ① Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother which was published in 2010, written by Amy Chua, a Chinese American and professor of Yale University → Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother, which was published in 2010, was written by Amy Chua, a Chinese American and professor of Yale University 2.以逗号代替句号,把两个简单句当成一个句子 ① Most mothers in China don’t approve of the author, it is reported that her 17-year-old elder daughter has been admitted into Harvard and Yale. → Most mothers in China don’t approve of the author though her 17-year-old elder daughter was lately reported to has been admitted into Harvard and Yale. 3.过多地使用并列句组合信息 ① Amy Chua is a Chinese American and is a professor of the Yale University and she wrote a book called Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother → Amy Chua, a Chinese American and professor of the Yale University wrote a book called Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother. 4.主从句叠置 → It tells how the mother taught her two daughters in the traditional Chinese way, which led to a heated discussion. It tells how the mother taught her two daughters in the traditional Chinese way led to a heated discussion. There is a book whose writer is a Chinese American called Amy Chua who is working as a professor in Yale named Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother coming out in 2010. → The book named Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother by Amy Chua, a Chinese American and professor at Yale University came out in 2010. 5.刻意使用从句，表达不自然 Appreciate and learn a well- organized composition from a student Basic Writing Battle Hymn of