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利弊优劣类作文不落俗套写法请看2012年肇庆一模基础写作题： 基础写作（共1题，满分15分） 【写作内容】 随着网络的飞速发展，网络购物正变得越来越普遍。请参考表里的内容，以“shopping online”为题，用英语写一篇短文。 【写作要求】 只能用5个句子表达全部内容，短文的第一句已经给出，不计入总句数。 【评分标准】 句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。 Shopping Online With the fast development of the Internet, shopping online is becoming more and more popular... 显然，此作文属“利弊优劣”类写作，很容易套用以下模板： With the fast development of..., ...has been popular. There are many advantages in.... First,...（优点一）. Second,...（优点二）. Third,....（优点三）。 However, therere some disadvantages...（缺点一）. Besides...（缺点二）.　　Also...（缺点三）. In my opinion, I dont agree... 如果考生生硬地套用模板去写作，就会给评卷老师造成“审美疲劳”，分数当然也是平平的，只能拿10分左右。 但是如何才能在这样的写作中不落俗套，值得我们每一位考生去思考。我觉得与其生硬地套用模板，还不如在词句的表达方面下功夫。如果考生能在词句方面用得精、准、妙，反而还能给评卷老师一种耳目一新的感觉，从而提高作文得分的筹码。下面我就以2012年肇庆一模的基础写作为例，在词、句方面去探讨一下如何去突破这种套用模板的瓶颈。 一、词汇方面 二、句子方面 1. 很多人喜欢网上购物，因为它方便、快捷。 [普通] Many people like shopping online, because it is convenient and quick. [高级] Considering shopping online as a convenient and quick way of purchase, a great number of consumers choose to buy products on the Internet. (分词) [高级] Due to the convenience and quickness, a large number of people enjoy shopping online. (介词短语) 2. 网上的货物丰富多样且物美价廉，所以很多人喜欢网上购物。 [普通] The goods online is very rich and very cheap, so many people like shopping online. [高级]Because there are a variety of goods online and the prices of these products are relatively low, a large number of people enjoying shopping online. (there be句型) [高级] Because of the varieties of the goods online and the lower prices, shopping online wins the heart of most customers. (介词短语) 3. 然而，网上购物也有很多缺点。 [普通] However, shopping online has also many disadvantages. [高级] However, the advantages of shopping online can not be ignored. （被动语态） [高级] Everything has two sides, so shopping online is not an exception. （状语从句） 4. 网上买回来的商品可能会货不对板，质量难以保证。 [普通] The goods we have bought online may be the ones whose quality is very poor. [高级] What we buy may be different from what we