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Our Changjing River-我们的长江,Our Changjing River-我们的长 ur hanging River-我们的长江 英语作文网为您收集 e all the ell River ur “ther River” and e als see the hang, iang River as ur “Father River” sine these t rivers are the sure f the ivilizatin f hinese peple ur rete anestrs lived alng the river, s bth rivers have itnessed the grth f hinese peple and the are ur valuable heritage hildhd is lsel assiated ith the hangiang River hen I as ung, father ften t e t the riversideI as alas stru b the beautiful sener f the river The ater as pure, lean and blue Se birds fle dn, sraped the ater and rared up suddenl and se grass flated in the ater quietl Ling int the distane, I sa the river andering tard the east Hever, after the thunderstr, the ater as turbulent ith se hirls in the iddle f the riverThe fresh breeze gave fae a feeling f isture Even tda I still reeber the agnifient sene and the ipressive feeling Se unpleasant hanges have taen plae sine then an hills alngside the river have bee bald re and re ud and dust are being ashed dn int the river eah ear rse still, driven b eni prfits, se fatries eep puring pllutants int the river Luil peple have been aaened t their bligatinThe learn a lessn fr the big fld in 1998 that e have t nurish ur hangiang River ust as it has nurished us and prtet it ust as it has prteted us nl after a harnius relatinship has been established beteen en and the river an e prevent the traged happening again and restre beaut t ur hangiang River 简 评 本文中，作者描写了童年所见的长江上的美景，表达了作者对生态破坏，环境污染问题的关注。文章一开始，作者就把长江与黄河做了一个类比，把长江称为“父亲河”。作者的童年在长江边度过，因此第二段中描写了当时未受污染的长江上的景色：蓝色的长江水纯净、清澈，可以看见其中的水草，一些鸟在江面上来回飞舞；远处，长江水静静向东流，而暴风雨后，江水湍流，激起几个旋涡，清新的微风吹在脸上，感到微微湿润。然而，好景不长，渐渐地，江边的山秃了，大量的尘土冲入江中。更糟糕的是，周围的工厂向江中倾倒污染物。最后，作者引用了1998年发生的洪灾，提醒人们要饮水思源，保护环境，防止悲剧再次发生。 本文不是单纯地写景，而是通过描写长江昔日的美景，提出一个深刻的问题，呼吁人们增强环保意识，提升了文章的立意。在语言上，作者把写景与说理自然地融合起来，展示了良好的写作功底。 稍嫌不足之处是由于二、三两段之间意义上有一个明显的转折，第三段段首应该加上衔接词hever，否则显得过于突然。 (点评教师：黄莺) ur hanging River-我们的长江 英语作文网为您收集